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The Gorgon Rune and the Flirting Dress
Plots  (Hired)   (Single-Storyline)
Silveressa's comment on 2014-04-17 02:56 AM
Is this written up for a particular world setting? (if so which, I want to check into it!) If not I can see this working out well in Shadow Run with a bit of tweaking, or fantasy settings with even more changes.

Nicely done, and gives a great usage example of the Flirting Dress. Go to Comment
The Gorgon Rune and the Flirting Dress
Plots  (Hired)   (Single-Storyline)
Kassy's comment on 2014-05-06 11:05 AM
4.5/5

A very good plot. One I'd like to try out with a group at some point. Go to Comment
The Gorgon Rune and the Flirting Dress
Plots  (Hired)   (Single-Storyline)
eleclipse's comment on 2014-04-17 09:37 AM
Intriguing use of the dress, i really like it. Go to Comment
Elizabeth Sheybad and the Flirting Dress
Plots  (Crisis)   (Encounter)
axlerowes's comment on 2014-04-18 03:30 PM
I have been told many times that the citadel is an Rpg site, not a fiction site. And that RPG fiction should end right before or right after something really awful or dramatic happens, that way the players can pick up where the author left off, so we continue this in a forum RPG, or write me another weird item and I will try an incorporate into another thread of this narrative. Go to Comment
Elizabeth Sheybad and the Flirting Dress
Plots  (Crisis)   (Encounter)
valadaar's comment on 2014-05-01 02:43 PM
I think fiction is fine here - we have a section for it, so don't let that hold you back.

A novel use of the dress, and a good one.
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Elizabeth Sheybad and the Flirting Dress
Plots  (Crisis)   (Encounter)
Silveressa's comment on 2014-04-16 06:32 PM
A fun short that feels like it's part of something bigger, I would enjoy seeing it continued someday.

Brilliant use of the dress, although I do wonder if the ink would run and perhaps bleed through the dress, making the message visible to all as the night wore on. Go to Comment
Elizabeth Sheybad and the Flirting Dress
Plots  (Crisis)   (Encounter)
Stork's comment on 2014-04-17 05:34 PM
A fine story. I also would like to read more. Go to Comment
Elizabeth Sheybad and the Flirting Dress
Plots  (Crisis)   (Encounter)
eleclipse's comment on 2014-04-17 09:46 AM
Nice, i could totally see this in a "girl genius" setting. I second the desidere to see more of this. Go to Comment
Rulund Drussel (1st Vassal)
NPCs  (Major)   (Political)
valadaar's comment on 2014-05-07 02:46 PM
A good, very detailed NPC, with lots of traits and bits and pieces.

Not in love with sentences continuing into blockquotes - I find the transition a little jarring.

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The Commandments of Koret
Systems  (Societal/ Cultural)   (Specific)
Silveressa's comment on 2014-04-06 05:23 AM


I really like this religion, it's rigid and a bit stoic, perfect for the reserved warrior of the group, and has plenty of quotable commandments that fit will in nearly any situation. (Which can work perfectly for an NPC to use to annoy, amuse and otherwise add life to anything the group might be involved with.)



I can also see this being of use in space faring sci-fi settings as the rules governing an alien society, or a far flung human colony having stumbled upon the huge stone monoliths of commandments and having translated them, believe them to be the words of the creator, or at the very least a superior race and modeled their colony after the teachings.



(Small note on wording, the phrase "when her harvests fruit from a worthy plant he takes-" I think is supposed to be "when he harvests-")

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Cheka Man's comment on 2014-04-06 09:28 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
axlerowes's comment on 2014-04-06 10:36 AM
thanks for the catch! Go to Comment
Silveressa's comment on 2014-04-06 06:05 AM


Outwardly kind, yet secretly cruel and manipulative, she's perfect to add to any royal kingdom or visiting nobility to add a dash of danger and political malfeasance.



I could also see her working well as a romantic sub plot for an unlucky PC. (of course she's only using the hapless PC to her own ends, but until they realize that...)



The D&D/pathfinder write up for stats at the end I personally found handy, since it makes the character even easier to add into a game, or convert to a different rule set if desired.



Also I really loved the pic, it captures her grace and beauty nicely.



(minor grammar note the phrase "As cruel and hateful towards other people as she maybe, she-" I believe is supposed to be "may be-")

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My Taalkastin Boatman
NPCs  (Minor)   (Natural)
Scrasamax's comment on 2014-04-02 11:22 PM
The story, interwoven with the vartanadel expressions, and the salient points from the dating NPC outline made for a solid submission.

I was caught unprepared for Lyle being Lila, and while I knew the woman was going to die, I was impressed with the execution. As they say in the bayou, you can eat dat Go to Comment
My Taalkastin Boatman
NPCs  (Minor)   (Natural)
Dozus's comment on 2014-04-01 06:32 AM
Any bias of using my own setting aside, I absolutely loved this. The narrative had me riveted from the opening lines to the last, and even though the ending was alluded to in the intro, I was still surprised by it.

You give a better characterization for a brutal, animalistic humanoid than I could have hoped for, as well as built very nicely on the skeleton outline of Swynmoor errata I provided.

Very well done. Go to Comment
My Taalkastin Boatman
NPCs  (Minor)   (Natural)
axlerowes's comment on 2014-03-31 10:46 PM


*Reduction: The event described here as reduction is approximate translation from the Kaanarite language. If translated directly the elven term means either to shrink or to reduce, but contextually it refers to censure or punishment of certain families buy other families. The exact details of these punishments was not clear to the author at the time of this writing.

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My Taalkastin Boatman
NPCs  (Minor)   (Natural)
Silveressa's comment on 2014-04-01 05:41 PM
Very nice the narrative tone sets the scene nicely, and the over all presentation felt fresh and well laid out, definitely one of my new favorites! Go to Comment
My Taalkastin Boatman
NPCs  (Minor)   (Natural)
Kassy's comment on 2014-04-02 11:03 AM
5.0/5 from moi aussi

As Sil mentioned, the presentation in this is neat. It makes for very pleasant reading. Well done :) Go to Comment
Scrasamax's comment on 2014-04-02 11:33 PM
An interesting character, and while he could be described as one dimensional, there are certainly people in real life who are one dimensional. I like the fact that Igor is a man of god out of fear, rather than any sort of real religious calling, and that many of his motivations, aside from divine fear, are based in real world materialism. Igor feels like a real person, with interests in caring for his family and his legacy, as well as having a level head about things like war.

This is a good character, and I could see using him not just in his given setting, but as a man of importance dealing with adventurers-upon-return, and doing the duties of the non-present King, such as making deal with mercenaries, settling disputes, endorsing or condemning actions such as hunting down people without any sort of oversight, or pardoning certain other people. Go to Comment
Scrasamax's comment on 2014-05-05 11:35 PM
It's beautiful, the integration is everything I would want, the strange, the mercenary, the malign, the corporate...

Thank you. Go to Comment
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