An interesting take on the flowers. The most interesting part of this, I thought, was having prostitutes wear the flowers of innocence. That's just... wrong. I mean, if the flowers affect them, then what's the point where they become children? Go to Comment

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It's great as a short story and a sub for the Oekaki challenge. I got slightly confused when the write-up switches from third-person perspective to first-person bu then I realise the whole thing is written from the killer's point of perspective. A great job! btw, you might want to link back to the original sub on Flowers of Innocence. Go to Comment

I like this! There are some really good bits of prose in here (buildings holding on like ticks, masons and whores needed to wet their business). There's about a dozen typos, though (and I know it's an Oekaki), and in a few places the story sort of becomes difficult to follow. Go to Comment

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Nice take on the Flowers. I liked how they were used to help Kensu, and how the monsters in this case was a killer. Though I think you should mention how both Kensu and the little girl (and as many other people as you feel necessary) worship the great god caesar193, I won't detract points for this omission. But still, bonus points for twisting the Flowers into an escape aid. Go to Comment

Interesting. Here are some typos and grammatical errors;

Kensu became used to feelings of guilt and shame

Kensu's handling of the dowry could not have come as a surprise.

his mind kept up a steady train of conversation

If Jua-awl was going to be so high and mighty about this he shouldn't have accepted the wager. If he cared so much about my fiance's family, why did he collect on the Wager,

what sort of a man, what sort of a bookkeeper takes a wager, collects it and then grows self conscious about how this bet will affect a family, and a wealthy family no less. I bet Jua-awl doesn't contact the brother-in-laws of the white washer men or stone masons he collects from.

row canyon between the two ridges held Undertown

An accomplished patron of vice like Kensu knew the glade

would force an innocence upon his pursuers, and hoped that this would spare his life. .

 

Sorry for taking a few creative liberties, some of it couldn't merely be corrected with a single word.

(Haven't checked the rest).

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Interesting group you have here, Some of them certainly have me itching to know more about them, especially Priest 2, some of the others seem a bit mundane, such as the Lifer or Sicko, whom I imagine as the head convict from Chronicles of Riddick and Comic Book Guy respectively.

I am curious to know what the intent is behind this group, because I assume it is something akin to M. Night Shamallamadingdong (or whatever his name is) movie Devil (drawn out, tedious in places, but overall good and interesting character study) Go to Comment

Sort of feels like the setup of one of those cerebral Twilight Zone episodes that stay in a single shot until the final scene when something crazy happens. I'm curious as to how they all ended up in jail, particularly the clergy (harboring criminals in sanctuary? religion persecuted?). Go to Comment

These were/are character concepts for my friends one shot All Flesh Must Be Eaten Game, it takes place in a prison. I haven't seen walking dead (which I have learned through cultural osmosis takes place in a prison), and I only played AFMBE once. All I know about his plot set up is A: Takes place in a prison B: There are zombies.

Dozus: Please look at the post again, and let me know if it is still not clear why the Priests are in the prison. I Go to Comment

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I don't like the path this conversation is taking.

I didn't take axle's comments to be too accusatory. More that he fixed the issue and was requesting a comment on the actual content vs. his spelling. (From my recollection, he admitted posting this while joining the Drunk Guild). Don't correct me if I am wrong axle. ;)

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Now THAT is funny! Go to Comment

Wow. I would add a press-gang element in there somewhere, unless i missed it, but holy crap this is useful. Go to Comment

Table 1: Courtiers and Courtesans:

Gain One Social Skill and Gain 5% standing for every chapter

0) Your pirate gets accused of stealing from the Lord and spends the rest of this chapter in the dungeon: (Minus 5% physical attributes, Minus 50% Wealth, Minus 50% Standing, Gain 5% reputation): Next Roll CC-3, SD, SS or LL+3 

1) Wrong side of the Coup, your pirate back the wrong horse in courtly power struggle and is forced out of court (Minus 50% standing, Minus 75% Wealth, 

2) Pirate is implicated in a plot against the King and is forced to flee the court (Minus 100% Standing): Next Roll SD or SW 

3) Your pirate gets a position as a man servant to a member of court, spend time pouring wine and moving chamber pots about: Next Roll CC or LL 

4) Your Pirate’s doomed affair with the spouse of powerful member of court is exposed (Gain one Enemy from courtier’s list, Minus 10% Standing): Next Roll CC-2, SD, SS or LL+3 

5) Your pirate gets involved in courtly rivalry and is forced to take sides (Minus 5% standing, Gain One Contact from Courtier table, Gain Two enemies from Coutrier’s table) 

6) Insult a peer get a challenged to duel: 1d12+1 for every combat skill
a. 1-8 loss duel received grevious injury: (Minus 10% reputation, Minus 5% physical attributes): Next Roll CC, SD or SS
b. 9: Draw: Next Roll CC
c. 10-12: Win the Duel (Gain 10 Reputation, Gain one combat skill, Gain One Enemy from Courtiers): Next Roll CC 

7) Get wrapped up in the court’s culture of gambling: Roll 1d12
a. 1-9: Lose 100% Wealth: Next Roll LL or SD
b. 10-11: Lose 50% Wealth: Next Roll CC, SS, or LL
c. 12: Gain 150% Wealth: Next Roll CC 

8) Work the Season at Court (Gain One Contact from Coutiers List, Gain an additional 5% Standing): Next Roll CC 

9) Your pirate has passionate but secret love affair with a member of the court (Gain one social skill, Gain only ally among Courtiers): Next Roll CC 

10) Get Appointed Diplomat! (Gain One Contact form Courtiers with a different Nationality, Gain One Language): Next Roll CC 

11) Advantageous Family Marriage: You or a member of your family marries an established member of the court. (Plus an additional 20% Standing, Plus 10% Wealth): Next Roll CC 

12) Gain a title! The king has bestowed favor upon you (Plus and additional 50% Standing, Plus 10% Wealth, Next Roll: CC+3 and at least +1 on all subsequent rolls on all charts except SW 

13) Access to the inner circle, your proto-pirate becomes an advisor to the King and is given a title land and influence: (Gain an additional 100% Standing, Gain two Allies from Courtiers, Gain 100% Wealth, Gain two Social Skills): Next Roll CC+3 and at least +1 on all subsequent rolls on all charts except SW

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Table 2: Land Lubber:

Gain One General Skill per Chapter 

 

0) Get on the wrong side of local mystic, become cursed with mental illness, and get chased out of town (Roll on the Curse Table): Next Roll LL-3, SD-4 or SW 

1) Striken by the plague, lose all his wages and spend a whole year being cared for by family and/or charities (minus 5% to physical attributs): Next Roll LL 

2) Hard Scrabble times lost all his land and spend most this chapter in debtors prison, Gains a contact in the crimminal : Next Roll LL -2, SD-4 or SS -2 

3) "Takes the King's shilling" and the proto-pirate gets pressed into the life of a sailor: Must Make Next Roll SD-4 

4) A blight, locusts or plant disease, makes refugees of the pirate’s whole community: Next Roll LL -2 or SW 

5) Gets conned out his farm, his land or his wage by a bunch of high born lawyer types (Minus 50% Wealth): Next Roll LL -2, SD-4 or SW 

6) Apprenticeship, you pirate worked a trade for this chapter of is life. As result of his new found skills he gains more options. If this is a subsequent Apprenticeship, increase the same skill or add a new skill. (Gain one trade skill, Gain 5% wealth): Next Roll LL+2, SS or SD 

7) Ends of up owning a dirt farm, the money he gets from the sale gives this pirate more resources when takes to the seas (plus 5% to wealth): Next Roll LL 

8) Joins a group of rowdy migrant workers and sometimes highway men, learns a little about fighting and a little about crime (Gain one criminal contact and one combat skill) : Next Roll LL or SS 

9) Displaced by war, ends up living and working in a foreign country (shift nationality association, learn second language): Next Roll LL or SW 

10) Marries up! Your pirate finds a mate with greater social standing and privilege: Next Roll LL+2 or CC -4 

11) Successful Merchant: Your pirate learned to work smart not hard. (Gain one social skill, 20% Wealth, One Merchant Contact): Next Roll LL+3, SS+2, CC or SD+2 

12) End up owning a successful farm: The sale of this farm prior to joining a pirate crew will be advantageous: (Gain 25% Wealth, Gain two Peasant Contacts, Gain 5% Standing): Next Roll LL+3 or CC-4 

13) Gain a Title: For some reason the King has given your pirate a title and a land grant (Gain 50% wealth, Gain 100% Standing, One Courtly Contact): Next Roll LL+3 or CC +3, +1 on all subsequent rolls on all tables except SW

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Table 3: Master and Commander:

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Salty Dog

Gain one seafaring Skill Per Chapter

1) Ordinary Seamen on Merchant Scow, get on the wrong side of the Boatswan, (Gain one enemy from Sailors): Next Roll SD-2 or LL

2) Ordinary Seamen on Merchant Scow, ship is caught in terrible storm: Roll d12

• 1-4 Pirate received grevious injury (Minus 20% attributes): Next Roll SD or LL
  
• 5-6 Pirate thrown overboard: Next Roll SW-2
  
• 7-8 Pirate Recieved Grevious injury in line of duty (Minus 20% Attributes, Gain 5% Reputation): Next Roll SD
  
• 9-11 Pirate Received Serious Injury (Minus 5% Attributes): Next Roll SD
  
• 12: Your Pirate Saved Ship (Gain One Seafaring Skill, Gain 5% Repuptation): Next Roll SD+3
  

3) Able bodied Seaman on Merchant Scow, which takes several long journeys (Gain one additional seafaring skill, Gain one Sailor Contact, Get Scurvey Minus 10% Physical Attributes): Next Roll SD+2

4) Able bodied seaman on Merchant Scow ship is attacked by foreign privateer: Roll+1 for every combat skill

• 1-4: The proto-pirate was captured by a foreign power, spends the rest of this chapter in foreign prison ship: (Suffer Grevious Injury Minus 20% Attributes, Gain Foreign Language): Next Roll SD 
  
• 5-8: Your pirate was captured by foreign power spends rest of chapter in foreign prison ship (Gain Foreign Language): Next Roll SD
  
• 9-11: You and your ship mates fend off the attackers (Gain 5% reputation, Gain one Combat Skill): Next Roll SD+1
  
• 12: Your pirate distinguished himself in the defense of his ship (Gain 20% Reputation, Gain One Combat Skill): Next Roll SD+2

5) Ordinary Seaman on Exploratory Expedition, the crew comes across a mysterious island that was previously uncharted: Roll d12

• 1-4: Your Pirate and a group of the crew go ashore to scout the island, when they return to the beach the ship is gone: Must Make Next Roll SW
  
• 5-6: Island is the domainion of ancient and hostile mystic who curse your pirate and the crew: Roll on Curse Table, next roll SD
  
• 7:  Island was burial ground for an ancient culture, your crew loots the crypts: Gain 5% wealth, Roll on Curse Table: Next roll SD
  
• 8-9: Island is occupied by hostile natives: Roll d12+1 for every combat skill >6=Gain One Combat Skill, <6 =suffer grievous injury (minus 20% attributes): Next Roll SD
  
• 10-11:  Rescue ship wrecked crew (Gain Two allies in sailors)
  
• 12:  A ancient treasure was hidden on the island, and is discovered by your crew, every sailor gets a share (Gain 10% wealth
  

6) Made Ship’s Cook on Merchant Brig: (Gain one Trade Skill:Cooking, Gain Sailor Contact): Next Roll SD+1

7) Made Sail Master on Merchant Brig: (Gain two trade skills: Rope Use and Sail Making, Gain Sailor Contact): Next Roll SD+1

8) Made Ships Carpenter on Merchant Brig: (Gain trade skill: Carpentry, Gain Sailor Contact): Next Roll SD+1

9) Able Bodied Seaman in his Majesties Navy, become Captain of Gun Crew aboard frigate (Gain one combat skill; Gain 5% Reputation): Next Roll SD+1

10) Able Bodied Seaman in his Majesties Navy, become Captain of Gun Crew aboard frigate, Gain one combat skill, Gain 5% Reputation and roll d12+1 for every combat skill held prior to this chapter

• 1: Cannon gets loose during drill, your pirate suffers grievous injury (Minus 20% physical attributes): Next Roll SD-2
  
• 2-4: Your frigate is captured by a foreign power, your pirate spends the rest of this chapter on foreign prison ship (Suffer Grievous Injury, Minus 20% physical attributes, and Gain foreign language): Next Roll SD-2
  
• 5-7: Your pirate’s frigate fights a pitched battle and captures foreign ship: (Suffer Minor Injury, Minus 5% physical attributes and Gain 5% Reputation): Next Roll SD+2
  
• 8-9: Your ship is commissioned as a privateer and captures several fat merchant ships: (Gain 5% reputation, Gain 10% wealth): Next Roll SD+2 or SS+2
  
• 10-11: Your frigate besieges, then captures and then loots a foreign town. : (Gain One additional combat skill, and Gain 10% Wealth): Next SD+2 or SS+2
  
• 12: Your ship played major roll in large naval engagement: (Gain One Additional Combat Skill, Gain 10% Reputation): Next Roll SD+3
  

11) Boatswain on a Merchant Brig that travels between several well established ports: (Gain one social skill, Gain additional Seafaring Skill, Gain 5% Reputation, Gain Two Sailor Contacts): Next Roll SD+2 or SS+2

12) Boatswain on His Majesties Frigate (Gain one social skill, Gain one Combat skill, Gain one additional seafaring skill, Gain 5% Reputation, Gain 5% Standing) roll d12

• 1: Captain of the Frigate goes mad and takes her off course, ship wrecks on strange shore: Must Make Next Roll of SW table
  
• 2-3: Frigate is Sunk in major naval action, the character and the surviors drift for weeks in open boats: (Gain One Sailor Ally and two Sailor Contacts): Next Roll SD-3
  
• 4-5: Ship Runs a ground on your character’s watch: (Lose 10% Reputation) Next Roll SD-3
  
• 6-8: Frigate fights in minor naval action and is boarded roll d12+1 for every combat skill held before this chapter: >7 gain one combat skill <7 suffer grievous injury minus 20% physical attribute. Regardless of the outcome character’s Next Roll is SD +2.
  
• 9: Frigate was destroyed by a powerful force of nature (a unique storm, whirlpool, great white whale, tidal wave, ice burg etc) and this character was the only one to survive. The character is still haunted by this event: Grievous Injury Minus 20% Physical Attributes, Plus 10% Reputation, Roll on Curse Table: Next Roll SD-3
  
• 10: Frigate is assigned to Garrison a captured port, the character is given guard duties in town (Learn Foreign language): Next Roll SD or SS+2
  
• 11: Frigate captures foreign Treasure Galleon carried stolen holy relics: (Gain 50% wealth and Roll on the Curse Table): Next Roll SD or SS
  
• 12: Your character commands the Bridge of the Frigate during a major naval engagement and leads the ship to victory: (Gain 50% Wealth, Gain 50% standing, Gain 50% reputation): Next Roll SD +4, SS+2, MC or CC
  

13) Boatswain on Merchant Scow, the old captain is ill and leaves ship to this pirate: (Gain 20% Wealth, Gain 5% Reputation, Gain 10% Standing): Next Roll MC

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Table 4: Seaside Scoundrel

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