Hmmm...
Allright. Good description with some minor syntax blips, although I'm not entirely sure what "Bard clothes" entails.
Background is not particularly interesting, but it is good. I'm not sure that the way in which he became so good at illusions is very well explained, even if you factor in Mazza's magical aptitude.
Thank you for not giving us a bunch of D&D stats. You described the spells well, in enough detail to tell what they do, but not too much.
Overall, average.
A nice average character, an NPC to fill out an tavern or faire. It has a small hook to explain its travelling. The history gives some reason as to why he is a competent illusionist. It is an average entry in my mind. Go to Comment
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Allright. Good description with some minor syntax blips, although I'm not entirely sure what "Bard clothes" entails.
Background is not particularly interesting, but it is good. I'm not sure that the way in which he became so good at illusions is very well explained, even if you factor in Mazza's magical aptitude.
Thank you for not giving us a bunch of D&D stats. You described the spells well, in enough detail to tell what they do, but not too much.
Overall, average.
3/5. Go to Comment