I think we can use more subs like this at all times, in lieu of Epics.
Yes, on its own merit, it is simply a mace...but no! its not simply a mace, its a mirror cast on a world, and I think if every campaign world featured ten to twenty mundane weapons of this caliber, campaign worlds would be happier places. Go to Comment
Heh, when I voted on the main sub, this mace was still in it. As it stands it's quite good but really needs to be used with the main submission. Go to Comment
The mace seemed a digression from the main point of the other piece, so I separated it. It is meant to support the Chosen of Uep-Hawet, but the description of the cult is easirer to follow without the mace in the middle of it. Go to Comment
Yes, they have a little of the "the world will be ours" rhetoric, but do not seem to dwell upon it. So they are actually fairly benign (let's just overlook the few victims they eat), making for very cultured cannibals.
The whole creature is a good new take on the ghoul - a part of it turned around, the rotten core preserved. I would be interested as to the origin of the disease in your telling, though it is clear that can be adopted for each world. It seems that it can be cured, if the victim is ready to resist it, resembling a kind of lycanthropy. It also reminds me of Finghaart's Sausages, which some more resistant victims may be using.
All in all, it is a great submission... and a disquieting monster that may live just next door, and you can be on a first name basis with. *looks nervously around* Go to Comment
Yummy submission, and I like the slow emergence of the ghoul's adopted faith, though like their masquerading as normal humans, their faith also seems to be a false one. I very much approve of this. Go to Comment
I actually thought some of the italicized text was a bit unnecessary, but overall a nice tone is set, and this is indeed, a great new take on ghouls. Reminiscent of the White Kingdom, with wisps of Poes Masque of Red Death, and maybe even a tad Dickensian(?) I think I prefer the slightly goth-Victorian undertone, to the pseudo-Egyptian themed context.
hmmm, Fascinating work, gets my mind spinning!
I would like to see more on the nature of the curse, more on the Eidolon Club (sounds deliciously morbid!) and would LOVE to see a plot worked off of this macabre creation.
Updated: The possibility of a cure exists, and has been added to the text. The description of the Mace of Sisral has been removed, and will become a supporting submission. Go to Comment
An enjoyable read, good narrative as olontur has already mentioned, although I too am not very partial to the italic passages, it doesn't seem as aesthetically pleasing.
Wulfhere- I'm just a random passerby, but I'd to mention that I like your submissions, as well as those of Scrasmax, Murometz and Manfred, the best. This is another excellent piece. You chose the German word "Zwitter", meaning "hermaphrodite". Is there a special reason, a hidden meaning, or did you just like the sound of the word? Would it make heterosexist players more paranoid when the island women are friendly with their characters? Go to Comment
Items (Melee Weapons) (Villanous)