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Legacy of the Pharaohs
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Kassy's comment on 2012-05-27 02:08 PM
I've always been a large fan of Ancient Egypt, ever since my childhood. As it was another major factor that contributed to my getting involved with roleplaying. I used to have "adventures" in my daydreams as a kid of being there. *Memories*

4/5 and HoH from me! Go to Comment
The Mace of Sisral
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Villanous)
manfred's comment on 2007-03-13 04:40 PM
It is okay. Nothing exceptional, but fine as a part of the cult. Go to Comment
The Mace of Sisral
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Scrasamax's comment on 2007-03-13 12:20 PM
Nice idea, and I think the cult section reads better with this removed and left on it's own. Good work. Go to Comment
The Mace of Sisral
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Cheka Man's comment on 2007-03-16 12:55 PM
A good solid idea. Go to Comment
The Mace of Sisral
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Villanous)
Murometz's comment on 2007-03-17 10:38 AM
I think we can use more subs like this at all times, in lieu of Epics.

Yes, on its own merit, it is simply a mace...but no! its not simply a mace, its a mirror cast on a world, and I think if every campaign world featured ten to twenty mundane weapons of this caliber, campaign worlds would be happier places. Go to Comment
The Mace of Sisral
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Villanous)
valadaar's comment on 2007-03-13 12:03 PM
Heh, when I voted on the main sub, this mace was still in it. As it stands it's quite good but really needs to be used with the main submission. Go to Comment
The Mace of Sisral
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Villanous)
valadaar's comment on 2007-03-13 01:01 PM
I agree with moving it apart - just that the mace is greatly enhanced by the details in the other sub. Go to Comment
The Mace of Sisral
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Villanous)
Wulfhere's comment on 2007-03-13 12:14 PM
The mace seemed a digression from the main point of the other piece, so I separated it. It is meant to support the Chosen of Uep-Hawet, but the description of the cult is easirer to follow without the mace in the middle of it. Go to Comment
The Mace of Sisral
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Villanous)
Wulfhere's comment on 2007-03-19 03:48 PM
UPDATED: Some details about the mace's appearance and history were added or revised. Go to Comment
The Chosen of Uep-Hawet
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (Country/ State)
manfred's comment on 2007-03-13 01:32 PM
Yes, they have a little of the "the world will be ours" rhetoric, but do not seem to dwell upon it. So they are actually fairly benign (let's just overlook the few victims they eat), making for very cultured cannibals.

The whole creature is a good new take on the ghoul - a part of it turned around, the rotten core preserved. I would be interested as to the origin of the disease in your telling, though it is clear that can be adopted for each world. It seems that it can be cured, if the victim is ready to resist it, resembling a kind of lycanthropy. It also reminds me of Finghaart's Sausages, which some more resistant victims may be using.


All in all, it is a great submission... and a disquieting monster that may live just next door, and you can be on a first name basis with. *looks nervously around* Go to Comment
The Chosen of Uep-Hawet
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Scrasamax's comment on 2007-03-13 11:58 AM
Yummy submission, and I like the slow emergence of the ghoul's adopted faith, though like their masquerading as normal humans, their faith also seems to be a false one. I very much approve of this. Go to Comment
The Chosen of Uep-Hawet
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Cheka Man's comment on 2007-03-16 12:42 PM
Ghouls that hide their ghoulishness. 5/5 Go to Comment
The Chosen of Uep-Hawet
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Murometz's comment on 2007-03-17 12:31 PM
I actually thought some of the italicized text was a bit unnecessary, but overall a nice tone is set, and this is indeed, a great new take on ghouls. Reminiscent of the White Kingdom, with wisps of Poes Masque of Red Death, and maybe even a tad Dickensian(?) I think I prefer the slightly goth-Victorian undertone, to the pseudo-Egyptian themed context.

hmmm, Fascinating work, gets my mind spinning!

I would like to see more on the nature of the curse, more on the Eidolon Club (sounds deliciously morbid!) and would LOVE to see a plot worked off of this macabre creation.

5. Go to Comment
The Chosen of Uep-Hawet
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valadaar's comment on 2007-03-13 10:25 AM
Hmm. And Scrasamax considered his Centurim submission disturbing.

Ugh!

But this is an excellent villanous organization and the tone of the piece is great!

Do you see the condition being curable once it has progressed to its full potential? Go to Comment
The Chosen of Uep-Hawet
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Wulfhere's comment on 2007-03-13 11:25 AM
Updated: The possibility of a cure exists, and has been added to the text. The description of the Mace of Sisral has been removed, and will become a supporting submission. Go to Comment
The Chosen of Uep-Hawet
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Kassy's comment on 2012-07-02 01:24 PM
An enjoyable read, good narrative as olontur has already mentioned, although I too am not very partial to the italic passages, it doesn't seem as aesthetically pleasing.

4.5/5 Go to Comment
The Chosen of Uep-Hawet
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Nafar's comment on 2012-07-02 01:21 PM
I like this. I like this a lot. Go to Comment
The Chosen of Uep-Hawet
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olontur's comment on 2012-05-29 01:58 AM
Useful, incredibly so! I enjoyed every bit of it, from the narratives to the plausible explanations.

The tone and setting are refreshingly innovative and new. Will use it very soon! Go to Comment
The Zwitter Islands
Locations  (Area)   (Water)
Barbarian Horde's comment on 2009-01-17 08:40 PM
Wulfhere- I'm just a random passerby, but I'd to mention that I like your submissions, as well as those of Scrasmax, Murometz and Manfred, the best. This is another excellent piece. You chose the German word "Zwitter", meaning "hermaphrodite". Is there a special reason, a hidden meaning, or did you just like the sound of the word? Would it make heterosexist players more paranoid when the island women are friendly with their characters? Go to Comment
The Zwitter Islands
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manfred's comment on 2007-03-09 12:23 PM
Yes, some of those islands can be just nice.

I strongly like the Nation Geographic additions, not the least the trained fish. Great work! Go to Comment
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