My only comments would be some general advice. I recommend specifying what type of stone the tablets are made of to give the submission more flavor. Also, aside from replenishing water, it may be useful to explain why ship's would put in to this island, and how often they do so (for instance, the island could be on the the path of a major trade route). Go to Comment
Nicely done. I like the fact that they were given more time to play their music, until the music didn't make them happy any more. This actually fits nicely with a particular world outlook I favor; music has power. Sometimes a lot of power, if the players are good enough. Go to Comment
I like it, a walk-through of a pseudo-Italian city-state's most famous road. The only thing I would add was that in old times stone was recycled. While the new buildings were being built at one end of the boulevard, the imposing citadel at the other end would likely be dismantled to provide stone for the other constructions. The new road might very well have been made from what was once curtain walls, and the other heavy stonework of teh old keep could have been reused in it's old role, a flying buttress being used in a new palace instead of a dungeon, but now it's exterior clad in handsome marble. Other uses would be cutting the stone into smaller pieces and using it to build the walls and foundations of the new buildings. This stone, likely originally chosen for strength and durabilty would be hidden under facades of more attractive stone mortared into place over it.
To keep the conflict at the end, the final problem of the keep could be the foundations of the edifice, perhaps itself built atop an older fortress, which was built atop an even older one, or some other problem that kept the base of the structure from being quickly and easily reused. Go to Comment
It starts out a bit slow, but I like the way it builds momentum. Actually, maybe momentum is a poor choice of words. What I mean is, the Boulevard comes alive as I absorb the tour-guide information, in succession.
The seeming minutae is what I really enjoyed, especially your impressive grasp of some of the lesser known guilds of yesteryear, Limners, Dexters, Colliers...terrific! Peoples names all have a nice ring to them as well. They fit together snugly.
The Play house is quite Shakespearean, nicely described.
well done! An impressive location with limitless possibilities for role-play! Go to Comment