I like this quite alot Wulfhere! The ambiance is great, as is the realistic bumbling of its owner, misplacing and accidentally using potions, keeping the old sword. I wonder though, does he or can he leave the shop, could it transmigrate while he was oout getting a spot of food to ea, or would it still be there when he got back? Go to Comment
I haven't yet figured out how to link or add to scrolls properly. When I do, I'd like to link this one up to the "flawed potions" scroll as well. I suspect that many of the items in the shop may be a little "off", much like the proprietor. Go to Comment
As these things go, the neighborhood is well done. Your writing style is straightforward and flows well. Your piece has a history (and shows how it changes over time) and strong versimilitude. It has nice detail, enough to help the quarter become "alive" in the mind of the players.
As a first submission goes, you are a breath of fresh air in Los Angeles. I am looking forward to your future submissions. Go to Comment
This has got to be the finest write up of (among other things) a beggar guild that I ever saw. Truly remarkable, there is nothing I can do but to love it.
So this Petra has crashed in the temple of a god of charity, right? Why doesn't the city guard intervene when a beggar, albeit a queen among beggars, crash in a respectable temple? Is this some sort of impoverished guild that has no standing with the watch?
At first I believed the "brotherhood of charity" was a front for the beggars, but your words made me doubt that. Please explain. Go to Comment
I agree with Muro for the most part. Overall there is rapid fire laundry list of places but I enjoyed that you didn't present them as a list-lists are the the citadel's greatest vice-and stuck to single narrative flow. You have a created vibrant and energetic setting. Thanks Go to Comment