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The Horned Lord
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Political)
Wulfhere's comment on 2009-01-18 02:38 PM
Thank you for the well-considered critique!

I meant for the Horned Lord's reaction to the Dark Lady to contradict his usual cold demeanor: Only she had the seductive power to shatter his reserve. The Lady's manipulations left him even more emotionally guarded than before.

Despite her resistance to the Horned Lord's control, she was not impervious to all he could bring to bear. Knowing the Horned Lord would eventually find a way to avenge himself, she fled. Had he been a lesser being, she would have remained to taunt him as you suggested. Go to Comment
The Horned Lord
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Political)
Kuseru Satsujin's comment on 2008-03-11 06:26 PM
Overall a well-developed article, though minor use of spell check would enhance it (most of the problems I saw were a few entries which appeared to be typos).

Some advice on emotional descriptions, with the Horned Lord described as being cold and merciless, emotional states such as, "goaded to a boil of frustration," don't quite work, since they run counter to the description of the Horned Lord's personality. I would suggest rather that such usages reflect this cold personality, for instance, changing the listed example to something like "cold fury at the Dark Lady's actions," or something similar.

Likewise, in the power struggle described for the Unseleigh court, if one member developed an immunity to the powers of another, they would be more inclined to fight, taunt, or otherwise engage the one who they were gaining power against, rather than flee. Go to Comment
The Horned Lord
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Political)
angryscotsman93's comment on 2009-01-18 02:11 AM
Well, I don't think that it's frowned upon, so much as it is considered a novel way of fighting. Perhaps the Aelfan don't have many iron deposits in their territory, or they considered mining the damn stuff to be "beneath" them. Go to Comment
Mortemayne
NPCs  (Minor)   (Mystical)
Cheka Man's comment on 2007-06-25 10:47 AM
So he has become a sort of vampire just to survive. Go to Comment
Mortemayne
NPCs  (Minor)   (Mystical)
Michael Jotne Slayer's comment on 2010-10-06 10:05 AM
Vote, HoH and a bump for this splendid and somewhat neglected necromaner. Go to Comment
Mortemayne
NPCs  (Minor)   (Mystical)
Michael Jotne Slayer's comment on 2011-05-19 11:13 AM
I somehow failed to HoH this last year when I said I would, fixing that now. Go to Comment
Mortemayne
NPCs  (Minor)   (Mystical)
valadaar's comment on 2007-06-25 12:43 PM
An excellent necromancer indeed!

This series is my favourite of your work Wulf! Go to Comment
Mortemayne
NPCs  (Minor)   (Mystical)
valadaar's comment on 2007-08-02 10:49 AM
How did this work get so few votes?? Go to Comment
Mortemayne
NPCs  (Minor)   (Mystical)
Wulfhere's comment on 2007-08-02 11:26 AM
It was a busy week. Go to Comment
The Court of Dark Memory
Locations  (Fortification)   (Forest/ Jungle)
manfred's comment on 2007-06-23 04:15 PM
And quite an interesting place, with a certain dream-like quality, though decidedly on the dark side of dreaming. The Mortemayne link seems to be broken, you may want to fix that (or just note that it will be posted later).

The victims of the local justice are a particularly nice detail. I could imagine an expedition to actually consult one for their wisdom, or whatever remains of it. In fact, there should be some creature sneaking around, doing just this, listening to their words... and their pain and insanity. I wonder what that creature would be like... Go to Comment
The Court of Dark Memory
Locations  (Fortification)   (Forest/ Jungle)
EchoMirage's comment on 2007-06-25 07:47 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
The Court of Dark Memory
Locations  (Fortification)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Cheka Man's comment on 2007-06-22 07:36 PM
Quite a dangerous place to be. Go to Comment
The Court of Dark Memory
Locations  (Fortification)   (Forest/ Jungle)
valadaar's comment on 2007-06-25 12:24 PM
A classic set of subs! Go to Comment
The Court of Dark Memory
Locations  (Fortification)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Wulfhere's comment on 2007-06-24 10:23 AM
Mortemayne has been fixed, now all that remains to be completed are the subs for the Horned Lord, the Gardein Hwit, and poor Sir Palomar. Go to Comment
The Court of Dark Memory
Locations  (Fortification)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Wulfhere's comment on 2007-06-25 12:29 PM
I had this one almost done a few months ago, but I decided to put it on the back burner when Valadaar's Unseen Fortress appeared.

Given their similar subject matter, one could easily use ideas from one to supplement the other. Go to Comment
The Court of Dark Memory
Locations  (Fortification)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Kassy's comment on 2008-07-11 06:32 AM
Wow this is a rather dangerous, but interesting place to be... Go to Comment
Sandals of the Eagle Legion
Items  (Clothes)   (Magical)
manfred's comment on 2007-06-21 03:17 PM
Little to say for me but that I like it. I like items that make sense in their own, entertaining way. Go to Comment
Sandals of the Eagle Legion
Items  (Clothes)   (Magical)
Cheka Man's comment on 2007-06-20 04:38 PM
They could kick law enforcement to get the wearers into trouble. Go to Comment
Sandals of the Eagle Legion
Items  (Clothes)   (Magical)
Murometz's comment on 2007-06-20 08:37 PM
quite Roman Empire-ish obviously, which is nice. I like the concept of haunted foot-wear. Nicely conjures an image of a forlorn legionnaire-spirit gazing, unnoticed, at a sandle wearer, contemplating the man's nature, and judging his actions.


if i had to nit-pick, I'd say that despite the fact that i love learning new words, in this case, Caligae(!), I think 'Sandals of the Eagle Legion', may have been a catchier, more regal title, too many g's and l's otherwise. Like I said, nitpick :)


Of course since this was inspired by my favorite sub of all time, how can I not like it?

quack (or be it whichever bird fits your RPG) Go to Comment
Sandals of the Eagle Legion
Items  (Clothes)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2007-06-20 06:18 PM
A good solid explanation for a decent magic item.

Perhaps if a decendant of the cursed Senechal were to unknowingly don these shoes, he would end up being walked off a cliff. Later the PC's find the poor fool, evidently a suicide or other form of foul play. Perhaps they need to investigate the truth - it would be an interesting mini-mystery.

"Hmm, look at his nails - they are broken and lots of dirt under them - looks like he grabbed the edge before he fell...." Go to Comment
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