I meant for the Horned Lord's reaction to the Dark Lady to contradict his usual cold demeanor: Only she had the seductive power to shatter his reserve. The Lady's manipulations left him even more emotionally guarded than before.
Despite her resistance to the Horned Lord's control, she was not impervious to all he could bring to bear. Knowing the Horned Lord would eventually find a way to avenge himself, she fled. Had he been a lesser being, she would have remained to taunt him as you suggested. Go to Comment
Overall a well-developed article, though minor use of spell check would enhance it (most of the problems I saw were a few entries which appeared to be typos).
Some advice on emotional descriptions, with the Horned Lord described as being cold and merciless, emotional states such as, "goaded to a boil of frustration," don't quite work, since they run counter to the description of the Horned Lord's personality. I would suggest rather that such usages reflect this cold personality, for instance, changing the listed example to something like "cold fury at the Dark Lady's actions," or something similar.
Likewise, in the power struggle described for the Unseleigh court, if one member developed an immunity to the powers of another, they would be more inclined to fight, taunt, or otherwise engage the one who they were gaining power against, rather than flee. Go to Comment
Well, I don't think that it's frowned upon, so much as it is considered a novel way of fighting. Perhaps the Aelfan don't have many iron deposits in their territory, or they considered mining the damn stuff to be "beneath" them. Go to Comment
And quite an interesting place, with a certain dream-like quality, though decidedly on the dark side of dreaming. The Mortemayne link seems to be broken, you may want to fix that (or just note that it will be posted later).
The victims of the local justice are a particularly nice detail. I could imagine an expedition to actually consult one for their wisdom, or whatever remains of it. In fact, there should be some creature sneaking around, doing just this, listening to their words... and their pain and insanity. I wonder what that creature would be like... Go to Comment
quite Roman Empire-ish obviously, which is nice. I like the concept of haunted foot-wear. Nicely conjures an image of a forlorn legionnaire-spirit gazing, unnoticed, at a sandle wearer, contemplating the man's nature, and judging his actions.
if i had to nit-pick, I'd say that despite the fact that i love learning new words, in this case, Caligae(!), I think 'Sandals of the Eagle Legion', may have been a catchier, more regal title, too many g's and l's otherwise. Like I said, nitpick :)
Of course since this was inspired by my favorite sub of all time, how can I not like it?
Perhaps if a decendant of the cursed Senechal were to unknowingly don these shoes, he would end up being walked off a cliff. Later the PC's find the poor fool, evidently a suicide or other form of foul play. Perhaps they need to investigate the truth - it would be an interesting mini-mystery.
"Hmm, look at his nails - they are broken and lots of dirt under them - looks like he grabbed the edge before he fell...." Go to Comment