This has some excellent points though. A nice bit of dramatic hooks, good descriptions, and clear writing.
Undead vulturoid... who would of thought? The vulture god might be an adjunct to The Raven of the Aviontix Gods. The bird gods are an interesting concept. Go to Comment
I don't tend to give em out, but hey: 5/5. This submission really appeals to me.
Wulfhere: What I like about your submissions, is that they are a fresh breath: After so long here, you begin to subconsiously pick up the writing styles of the people who post often. This is not those subs a BAD thing; on the contrary, most of the people in this site make top-quality material, but having a new person in with great ideas and a fresh way of presenting them makes posts all the more interesting. Go to Comment
I like this piece, once again showcasing the hubris of accomplished mages. I like this primitive vulture god avatar and am curious to see the newer shinier vulture gods. Go to Comment
Sorry to step on your toes there. You should still make your vulture god: After all, the worship of Anut-Khanut was supplanted later by better, shinier vulture gods with cooler names. (Darn it! I wanted this to be a humorous post originally, but it insisted on turning into a horror/pulp piece.) Go to Comment
Heh, what a nice collection of problematic items, and a quirky wizard to boot. One like this may make for a great NPC, or background for a character - no wonder a PC would rather become an adventurer, than be one of Agarn's test subjects. My favourite is the Transmigration Powder, by the way.
And let's not forget The Agate Pectoral of Vetthes, when a man who only considered becoming his apprentice ended horribly. Agarn had clearly a talent for this. :) Go to Comment
Lovely submission. I would of made this a scroll and each item its own entry, that way you could link those items into other submission text But that is just me. It would do well to have this guy as an NPC submission as well. This way you get a nice expansion of the character. Go to Comment
"I throw the powder at the bars of the cage!"
- "In midair, the powder turns to a sticky slime substance and lands on the bars with a 'Splork!'. A steady trail of smoke appears as the slime eats away at the bars. After three seconds, the slime slides off the bars and begins slowly slipping towards you, rythmically making disgusting sounds reminiscent of bodily functions. The cement floor begins eating away slowly wherever the slime touches it."
"I .. er... uh... RUN!"
I like the powder :)
I nice little compendium of unintentionally dangerous items. Go to Comment
I found myself grinning through most of this post, and laughing when I wasn't grinning. I love how Agarn used and abused all of his apprentices, using them in typical grab that item sort of trap springing, to hitching them to chariots, and using them as guinea pigs for experimentation. I also like the shout outs to ancient Egypt with some of the names, and that fact that no one can pronounce the command phrase on the Agate Pectoral of Vetthes. Go to Comment
Items (Art and Music) (Non-Magical)
How are these drums created? Go to Comment