Interesting Idea. I like it. It isn't an epic Item, but a very nice piece of work to throw in.
Suggestions: Fill out the story of the paladin. Make his story really epic. Then I would add in something about town gossip blah blah blah. Fill it out some you get the idea. You don't have to though. Not every item in Strolen's citadel needs to be a 5.0 item.
In my mind's eye, I envisioned a sorrow-filled family member bringing the cloak to some sort of commercial mage, sadly asking that it be enchanted to ease the wearer's sorrow. The enchanter brought forth the magics his client requested, but lacked the ability and discernment to notice the malignant undercurrents within the cloak's comforting presence. Go to Comment
I love how subtle it is, something that seems so innocuous and really is... mostly. Is there a particular reason for it to be the way it is? It has a history with the paladin's wife but I feel there should be more to it than that.
This is a really fun submission, and I like the demonic creatures impersonatting archetypes of girls we all knew in high school. Everytime, you start gaming for the day it takes a bit of exposition for everyone to get into character. This would be a great place to remind everyone that "hey it is D&D time". If I use this I will take your advice and inter-weave this into a larger quest. Go to Comment
UPDATE: OOPS! I had a typo in one of the headings. The bold is fixed.
Of course, a dignified fellow like myself would never poke fun at an icon of roleplaying like Mr. Gygax... How many years ago was D and D first published? (scratches his head and pulls out the notepad and pencil...)
If people like this one, I'll try to make it part of a series of subs that revisit all the hoary old RPG clichés, occasionally throwing a few twists into the works. Go to Comment