I think it's very good (even though it is just the "mighty sword" cliche), lots of mystery and cool details, and I like the name.
There's just one thing I would say is a problem, and I didn't detract for it, because it's more of a personal preference- I would say that the name "Senek" (which suggests ancient Egypt) doesn't really fit with the Celtic names, and in addition, I would stray away from using overtly Celtic names (it just seems boring to me to use real Earth languages). But that's just my personal prejudice. Go to Comment
I love the post and the fact that the magic item has only the magic of reputation left.
You really need to put together either a mythic NPC post (for Senek) or a "Era Post" (Systems, Political Historical), to help ties these together. We have bits and pieces linked by some free text. Go to Comment
Thanks for the input, CP. You're right about the names; I was trying to loosely connect the item with a couple of my previous posts, with results that were a bit discordant. I hope to detail Senek and the history of the area in future submissions. These will reveal that Senek was originally a foreigner, who introduced advanced ideas of warfare and governance to the region in the course of his rise to power.
Unless a better explanation occurs to me before then... Go to Comment
Eventually, I will be able to tie these together, but not yet. I need to complete some more posts first. One link that was established is that the Dwarven Steelbows were also possessions of Senek's dynasty.
The Druid-Magus Cuthbad Mac Corhan gained his supernatural wisdom from The Eternal Witness when the druidic mysteries were celebrated there, and indeed, the test that he devised to find the Warlord of the Clans may have taken place in the sacred grove dominated by that ancient, haunted tree. (Eventually, I would like to detail Cuthbad as well as his king.) Go to Comment
This is a perfect Garage Sale item. It is subtly cursed, and some might not see it as a curse at all. This one has picked up a negative reputation, which I would like to see downplayed... otherwise no one will want to have the cloak (thus negating its effect(. Go to Comment
Interesting Idea. I like it. It isn't an epic Item, but a very nice piece of work to throw in.
Suggestions: Fill out the story of the paladin. Make his story really epic. Then I would add in something about town gossip blah blah blah. Fill it out some you get the idea. You don't have to though. Not every item in Strolen's citadel needs to be a 5.0 item.