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Brother Aethelstan
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Wulfhere's comment on 2006-10-12 12:22 PM
Updated: Minor revisions were made to the character and some errors were corrected. The "Back in the Day" notes were reformatted as well. Go to Comment
The Sending of Axtrami
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Desert)
Strolen's comment on 2006-10-08 05:19 PM
I would be wary to carry any glass into that city again. Go to Comment
The Sending of Axtrami
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MoonHunter's comment on 2006-09-30 01:18 PM
While this is a lovely post, well written and presented, why does the creature of wind and glass still exist? Actually why is it alive at all? The Deitiy's spirit moved the wind and the glass to become a weapon against the Reavers. Wonderful part that. They were avenged in a fitting way. Like that. Why does this thing still exist? It has served its purpose. That is what left me kind of hollow on the submission.

Now, if clerics of this god could summon a glass wind of vengence, that would be interesting. Go to Comment
The Sending of Axtrami
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Shadoweagle's comment on 2006-09-30 12:08 AM
Interesting view on the language there, Wulf. I always thought of the word Ouzquin a little differently, however: You had much of it similar to my idea though - 'Ouz', i percieved as a prefex meaning 'of glass', for example the word Ouzala would stranslate into "Staff of Glass", roughly (The 'Zala' bieng 'Staff'). The entire word "Ouzquin", however, simply is the word for Glass.
So Ouz is simply a derivative of Ouzquin, used when saying something is of Ouzquin nature, or is made of Ouzquin.
The word Dremorix has several meanings (Shifting, making, altering etc...), and is commonly used when expressing Change - especially in a creation(over destruction) sense. So for example, those who make glass can be referred to as OuzDremorix (makers of glass, or creators of glass).

I am going to make an entire language out of this, you'll see! :)

But enough of that, onto the post!
I can't help but like this: As I said before, it's like fan-art and it's very humbling! :D Go to Comment
The Sending of Axtrami
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Scrasamax's comment on 2006-09-30 01:12 AM
Nice stuff man, and the Ouzquin Dremorix rule! Go to Comment
The Sending of Axtrami
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Cheka Man's comment on 2006-09-29 04:36 PM
It is a really good tale. 5/5 Go to Comment
The Sending of Axtrami
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Pariah's comment on 2006-10-01 08:41 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
The Sending of Axtrami
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Dozus's comment on 2013-02-13 03:10 PM
Fantastic story. Go to Comment
The Sending of Axtrami
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Murometz's comment on 2006-09-29 03:29 PM
Beautiful! With every haunting Ouzquin Dremorix addition, an urge is felt to explore MORE of its mysteries !!!

nice prose Wulf! Go to Comment
The Sending of Axtrami
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Murometz's comment on 2006-09-29 09:49 PM
you will do well in helping with SE's planned OD langauge post!

(wont let me vote) Go to Comment
The Sending of Axtrami
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Murometz's comment on 2006-09-29 09:50 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
The Sending of Axtrami
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valadaar's comment on 2014-11-13 11:51 AM
Spectacular visuals on this one. A miracle to add to one's worlds.

It would seem Gods with foresight are a rare things, and hardly conducive to a good story.

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The Sending of Axtrami
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Wulfhere's comment on 2006-09-29 09:31 PM
For those into such things, the linguistic assumptions that I used for this tale included:

Axtramiya translates to “Axtrami’s”: The suffix –ya indicates a possessive.

Zuno translates as “Spire” or “Spiral”: I derived it from the "Zunouza" dagger, which I decided came from the roots Zuno and –ouza, translating as “Spiral of Glass”

"Ouzquin" would then translate as Ouz-Quin: "Glass" + "holy" or "Sacred"

"Dremorix" would translate as Dre-mor-ix: "Shape" + "Person"
(The suffix -ix or -ex indicates a plural)

"Quilano" translates as Qui(n)-Lano: "Holy" + "Dawn" Go to Comment
The Sending of Axtrami
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Wulfhere's comment on 2006-09-30 03:16 PM
I had pictured this being of glass and wind remaining as a guardian spirit of the Ouzquin Dremorix, wandering the wastes until the people’s need called to it. It remained as the guardian of the worshippers' "Ouzala Hemisa" Glass Orbs.


Your mileage may vary, of course. If you prefer a sending that comes only at the most dire need of the priests of Axtrami, there's nothing wrong with that way of doing things. Go to Comment
The Sending of Axtrami
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Wulfhere's comment on 2006-09-30 03:45 PM
Obviously, fantasy linguistics is not an exact science... Go to Comment
The Sending of Axtrami
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Wulfhere's comment on 2006-10-08 06:42 PM
Naturally, it ravaged the economy to lose all those 2 silver piece deposits. Go to Comment
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MysticMoon's comment on 2013-08-26 11:41 PM
A nice bit of history. I'm liking the Ouzquin Dremorix. Go to Comment
The Sword Blooddrinker
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CaptainPenguin's comment on 2006-09-28 06:40 PM
I think it's very good (even though it is just the "mighty sword" cliche), lots of mystery and cool details, and I like the name.

There's just one thing I would say is a problem, and I didn't detract for it, because it's more of a personal preference- I would say that the name "Senek" (which suggests ancient Egypt) doesn't really fit with the Celtic names, and in addition, I would stray away from using overtly Celtic names (it just seems boring to me to use real Earth languages). But that's just my personal prejudice. Go to Comment
The Sword Blooddrinker
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MoonHunter's comment on 2006-09-29 02:54 PM
I love the post and the fact that the magic item has only the magic of reputation left.

You really need to put together either a mythic NPC post (for Senek) or a "Era Post" (Systems, Political Historical), to help ties these together. We have bits and pieces linked by some free text. Go to Comment
The Sword Blooddrinker
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Iain's comment on 2006-11-14 04:45 PM
The link to the dwarven steel bows instead takes you to the Eternal Witness. Go to Comment
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