I agree with what Shadoweagle said. The ruleset/setting specifics should probably be changed, and, though I like the background, it is a bit sparse. Pretty much everything else was fine, no spelling or grammatical errors. Except for the first line.
"Also known as Falcon Rapiers, Danamax Rapiers are more elongated than normal rapiers, about two or three inches longer than a normal Rapier."
This would be better written to me as:
"Also known as Falcon Rapiers, Danamax Rapiers are more elongated than normal rapiers, by about two or three inches"
This rids the sentence of the redundant second saying of "normal rapiers".
Anyway, you've turned out another good sub, Infested-jerk.
(although it's a little disconcerting to keep calling someone a jerk, at least someone who didn't deserve it). Go to Comment
The update is better. It is oddly hard to read in stops, as the text gets dense or awkward (alternatedly).
The Blood Beast section needs more information for me. Amended. I put in the Strolen's links to your in works Blood Beast submission. My question is how did this bow generate the magical blood beast transformation? Since The Blood Beast and its descendents exist, how did they "get into the bow" or how did this Corran bind one/ duplicate the magic.
The Blood tied bow is interesting in general though. It could use a bit more description for me and a bit more tie in to a world (a way to work it into a world). Go to Comment
The Bloody Bow's background is somewhat generic (a god give the item to a powerful guy then it gets lost to time), the powers are a little like most things you would find in any RPG, your basic vampiric bow. But the added powers, such as the transformation to a Blood Beast, make it more than cliche. Your use of what appear to be fairly system specific rulings (as far as I can tell, it's D&D) is a little unhelpful, as it is best to leave the specifics to be determined by the various DM's. I have a question though, you refer to the Blood Beast, is that someething that might be found in the wild? If it is, will you be submitting it soon? Nicely written sub. Go to Comment
Good alternative options to acquire charges could be:
Automatically gains 1/day
Kill an enemy
Bring an enemy under half HP
Cause an Enemy to flee
Dip the bow in the blood of a powerful creature
Feed the Bow Blood (IE: Cut yourself to feed the bow... this could be used as a gambit.) Go to Comment
Kotor of the Glade. I like the name. He seems a good NPC to flesh out your gaming world. Kotor does not "feel" like a major plot-starter to me, but it really doesn't matter. Not every toad/crab/human that the party comes across needs to be a plot hook. You did a great job with the physical description, very...Descriptive. Welcome to the Citadel, Infested-jerk. Go to Comment