77. Hiccups that last eternally and are impossible to cure.
78. You can only eat and derive nourishment from raw pine cones. Every thing else cause "bodily regection."
79. You have constant allergy/sinus problems for the rest of your life.
80. An town crier that no one else can see or hear constantly announces your business both public and private.
81. Same as 80, but everyone can see and hear him. Go to Comment
The recursive portal trap is inherently different for a few reasons:
1: The portal is entirely harmless without any ammunition fired into the trap.
2: Players are not physically disabled in any way, besides arrows and bolts sticking out of their bodies.
As to it being a "Straight copy" from the game portal, the differences between a game where a player can create an endless loop of portals and an object within a game that is an endless loop of portals the player characters have no control over is pretty large. Portal did not originate the idea of one portal leading into another.
I will have to be honest here, and say that this trap bugs me for a lot of reasons. I don't believe that it varies significantly enough from your Recursive Portal Trap submission to justify putting it into its own sub. And it also loses points from me for being a straight copy from the game Portal. You didn't add value to the basic premise, other than the 3rd portal variants, and you didn't give any justification for the existence of these portals in a fantasy setting.
I agree that it would be neat to see portals used within a dungeon, but this submission leaves me wondering how they got there in the first place. Go to Comment
As I have seen AG do on many submissions, I must now give a disclaimer: when commenting, I try my best to be as honest as possible rather than be as uncritical as possible. I never mean any offence to the author personally. In fact, I respect a lot of your work, Infested; this sub just left me feeling lukewarm on the first reading. I guess that Portal has trained me to view any pair of matched portals as virtually the same thing -- a nifty tool, but hardly worth writing up all the various combinations thereof. Hence my comment that this and the Recursive Portal Trap are really one and the same.
Still, I read through this again and tried *NOT* to view this through the lens of Portal and you know what? I kind of like it after all. I would still like some explanation for the existence of the trap in a dungeon -- I can't imagine that they would be common in a fantasy setting. Maybe there was a wizard who always wanted to skydive . . . probably met his end in his own harmless-looking trap.
I'm not sure what to make of this. It's not a bad idea, but the majority of the submission is just a playlist. The songs might be better suited to a forum thread, while the shield itself needs everything Echo suggested and maybe a little more. Go to Comment