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Incarnate Ascension
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Ted's comment on 2011-05-20 11:11 PM
Update: 4, E added. This is directly because of the The Registers submission. Go to Comment
Incarnate Ascension
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Dossta's comment on 2013-03-12 06:01 PM
This could be a very compelling religious system, if it answered a few more questions. First, is this the actual reality of the universe, or just something taught by a religious sect? Second, if this is reality, how aware are the people of the varying shards? Do they have legends about other shards? Are there accounts of visitors from nearby shards?

Could make a really interesting game, but it's a bit too "high-concept" to really make it to the table. Go to Comment
Incarnate Ascension
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Vagoasdf's comment on 2014-10-23 04:30 PM
It looks good, but a bit to hard to implement. There are a few looses ends, and it looks generaly like you are overcomplicating the raw stuff. And some points are pretty weird.
EX: 8: The Conflicted One is God of Conflict.

A: The Conflicted One is the singular most powerful individual alive within the Universe. His command of reality is absolute.

AND:

14 Player Characters are generally Conflicted Ones.



So then. The conflicted One is a singular man? All the players are gods of conflict? Are there other Conflicted Ones or the players are Way to over the "Normal Character" .... and What happens when a PC dies? Go to Comment
Lydecker Cain, The Universe That Was
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Pieh's comment on 2011-03-26 12:38 AM


I have no idea what I just read. What is this? How is this to be used? Is Cain a planet? A universe? Something like Gaia, or Mother Earth, is how this feels, but we have no real idea what this is. It reads like a creation myth of religious significance, but falls short of explaining anything to a useable degree. Withholding vote until I figure this one out.


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Lydecker Cain, The Universe That Was
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EchoMirage's comment on 2011-03-26 09:36 AM


I join in Pieh's confusion.



It sounds like something from Warren Ellis, albeit with less clarity.



I too am withholding my vote.


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Lydecker Cain, The Universe That Was
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axlerowes's comment on 2011-05-12 12:01 PM


 



I like this one, yet at the same time acknowledge everyone critiques as accurate and valid.  I agree this write up makes no sense and relies so much on the suggestion of information as to be almost devoid of information, yet I think it tells a story and sets a tone.  The contradictions (though some them may be typos) and the gaps only help to set that tone and they tell you about what is unknown and as well as known.



 



Many world views ascribe to the forces of nature personalities.  Indeed, some world view personify everything, now that is not the way the actual universe works, but what if it was?  <b> What if thought was indeed to the core of existence?  Then nothing could exist without thought? </b>  If that was the case then everything that is or was could be traced back to a thinking being.  I think, and maybe I have it wrong, this is the type of the universe describe here.   And if this is the case then the human form is not just a product of evolution (or not at all a product of evolution) but a product of an intellect (in this case existence and the universe that was), and this would explain the human centric nature of the universe and why it is personified as an old man. 



 



I think I understand it  I think it is daring and interesting take on roleplaying.   


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Lydecker Cain, The Universe That Was
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Ted's comment on 2011-03-25 06:23 PM
Update: Oops, HTML/BBCode Goof Go to Comment
Lydecker Cain, The Universe That Was
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Ted's comment on 2011-05-01 09:56 AM
Update: Hopefully with The Shattering submitted, this will make more sense to you guys. Go to Comment
Lydecker Cain, The Universe That Was
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RGTraynor's comment on 2011-04-02 05:58 AM


Mm, similarly.  It sure strikes me as a creation myth, and as a creation myth it works, but here's the rub: where's the tie in to the Quest?  How does this relate to fallen empires?


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Lydecker Cain, The Universe That Was
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RGTraynor's comment on 2011-05-09 02:16 PM


A little more, yep, but only that.  Too many unanswered questions.  Who and what are the "Conflicted Ones?"  Who and what is Lokatt?   We get some of the metagame knowledge about Cain here, but what do the PLAYERS perceive?  How is it that he remembers nothing about the Shattering (in one paragraph) but has all this pre-Shattering knowledge (in another)?



Beyond that, the presentation looks like a cut-and-paste of bits from several files into this one; no rhyme or reason to the organization.  The vote comes from the definition of votes in the 1s: a rough draft not yet suited for public consumption, and a month and a half in, it should be finished or converted into a WIP sub.


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Lydecker Cain, The Universe That Was
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MysticMoon's comment on 2011-03-26 12:10 PM


I think the problem is that it is too vague and could use more details. I also think the overall theme is a little scattered (is it a creation myth? a tale about immortals?). I would suggest figuring out what the theme is and then going back through paragraph by paragraph, weighing each one against how well it fits/expands/explains that theme.  Then cut, reword, and expand as needed until the message is clear.



Just my 2 cents.



This looks more like a first draft than a polished sub, so I will also withhold my vote.


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The Shattering
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Dozus's comment on 2011-05-03 02:31 PM


Very atospheric, you've done well in setting the stage. I look forward to more!


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The Shattering
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axlerowes's comment on 2012-02-12 07:26 PM


I like the surreal quality of this piece. But you may as well break down the fourth wall and give us the downlow OCC/Meta game explaination of things.

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The Shattering
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valadaar's comment on 2016-11-25 11:46 AM
I would probably use this as a snippet of text from a random book in a wizard's library...
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Ted's comment on 2011-05-09 03:48 PM
Kindly take a look at the suggest sub and see if that improves the confusion a little. Go to Comment
The Shattering
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RGTraynor's comment on 2011-05-09 02:03 PM


It's a start, but only that, IMHO.


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The Shattering
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MysticMoon's comment on 2011-05-08 11:18 PM


I have read this a few times but I don't really get it. I like the language, I like the tone, but I don't understand the content. It seems too vague and disconnected.


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The Shattering
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Juliet's comment on 2011-05-04 03:27 PM


Way back in high school i had a similar idea, well or maybe not, it's hard to tell from the information.



Anyway: Sounds awesome. Right up my alley.



Some Ideas you might find helpful:



Godlike Powers are reversibly relative to the size of the world. Any conflicted one can control a world where only he lives, but it takes huge powers, or long work, to exercise them in a bustling city, that power has to be taken from all the other residents. So if a group of conflicted ones come in a small world which has only one inhabitant, he could have nearly godlike powers, if he is conflicted. Newcomers have to “rip” power from the original inhabitant to battle him.



The “Edge of the World” is a mist, through which sometimes other worlds can be seen, as foggy shadows. The fog lifts or goes at least less thick if two world connect.



Memories (of everyone or the conflicted ones) are also shattered. They can only remember some things or nothing of their past at all. Conflicted Ones can shape new memories with their powers, search the shatters for their original memories or even rip memories from others. (This could be three different kinds of learning new abilities, if any kind of rule system is used).



 



I'm sure I can come up with some more Ideas...


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The Vattic Trap
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Cheka Man's comment on 2011-04-29 01:56 PM


You could set an adventure inside this trap.


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The Vattic Trap
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Dozus's comment on 2011-04-29 03:38 PM


Quite a torture device. Though I like it, I have to play devil's advocate and ask: why all the scary dreams? If you've already got someone caught in a metal box with multiple sets of claws, why bother with the added torture of nightmares?



I guess what I'm saying is, I like the concept, but I'd like to see a little more with the background.


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       By: Almar

While setting up camp for the night, the PC's are aproached by another group of adventurers who seem nice enough. The road is somewhat dangerous and the other group suggests camping together. The two bands split watches, one adventurer from each group watching at once. The night goes by without incident, the next day the PC's travel with the other group as they are going the same way.

The group consists of Hordel the ranger, who is skilled with the bow. Hordel is a quiet man who speaks little but appears quite skilled. Dremar is a barbarian who is a little excentric, he seems to be an excasive drinker and thiunk that battle is the solution to everything. He appears to be a stout and powerful fighter with his greataxe. Ferrin is the leader of the group, a rouge by trade. He is daft and witty, speaking with the PCs often and asking many questions. He fights with finesse with his rapier. Preminitat as a cleric but he will not say which god he worships. He uses his spells to empower and heal his party and fights with a club. He sticks close to Ferrin. Ferrin is a great talker and tells much of himself and his party, but asks even more about the history and capabilities of the PCs. He tells of some adventures his party has had, and they seem like an interesting group of mercenaries. Hordel is quite and has little interest in speaking with the PCs, he ignores most questions. He spends a lot of time with Dremar and sometimes Ferrin. Dremar seems to not care about any questions ansked to him, nor does he seem to know the answers. He seems battle hardened and is a simple man. Preminitat rarely starts conversations but will speak with the PCs. However, some of his accounts of the party's history seem to condradict those of Ferrin.

The Party spends another night and day with Ferrin's group. One of four things can happen on the third night.
1: While eating dinner around the fire, Ferrin gets into an argument with one of the PCs when he/she mentions the discepincies between Ferrin's stories and Preminitat's.
2: Hordel gets mad after repeated questioning about his life from the PCs.
3. Preminitat gets mad after repeated questioning from the PCs about what god he worships.
4: One of the PCs rejects the offer of a drink from Dremar and he takes it as an insult.
All of these scenarios result in a battle between the parties. If Ferrin's party is defeated and still lives he swears vengance. His party may then cross paths with the adventurers again.

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