Yeah, basically...I want more!!
You had me hooked. Awesome intro and great mood set. Now I just want a few details on how you invision it and how to use. As is I can definitely do some things with it but I want your spin. On target, just want to be spoon fed a little bit more! Feed me more blood!
This makes a really excellent introduction. I have an inkling of what the mask does and how it operates. The tone of horror is conveyed really well.
I am left with a few questions, though. What does it look like? What is its history? Does it grant powers to the wearer or just whisper suggestions?
Wow, complex. I'll need to take some time to read and think through this before I vote.
Might I suggest you combine this with the more "artisitc" Shattering sub? I feel like both are lacking something, and the something would seem to be each other. This is highly functional with little artistic flair, and the other is all style with little substance. Don't get me wrong, I think the ideas presented here are really interesting, but I think you leave something to be desired in terms of organization.
I have no idea what I just read. What is this? How is this to be used? Is Cain a planet? A universe? Something like Gaia, or Mother Earth, is how this feels, but we have no real idea what this is. It reads like a creation myth of religious significance, but falls short of explaining anything to a useable degree. Withholding vote until I figure this one out.