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The Identity Conduit
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MysticMoon's comment on 2011-05-28 11:13 AM


The link to "Secrets of the Register" isn't working. It leads me to a dark place... with a Grue....


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The Registers
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Strolen's comment on 2011-05-21 11:55 AM


Is it a Register or Obeilisk? Wasn't sure if you were talking about two different things. "dismiss the Register as a natural creation" sort of tells me that it is dismissed as a natural creation which I am not sure your intent? Are you suggesting it is natural?



All said...I am just simply confused by what it is and what is supposed to do. The Truth Mage part threw me all off as it seems another unexplained tangent. I need to be slowly spoonfed this as I can't readily follow it. Sorry.


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The Registers
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EchoMirage's comment on 2011-05-28 09:40 AM


So - a register with obelisks as terminals, and they perform all sorts of privacy violations, store personal information and are willing to hand it to third parties, perhaps? So prone to abuse!



At least the obelisks do not perform cavity searches.



All in all, this has great potential, but really needs a more thorough write-up.


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The Registers
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Ted's comment on 2011-05-20 04:13 AM
Update: Changing this over from in-work hidden to publicly available.

More soon to come. Go to Comment
The Registers
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Ted's comment on 2011-05-21 08:27 PM
Update: Quick edit to address the line about the unnatural origins of the Register. Go to Comment
The Registers
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Ted's comment on 2011-06-07 02:50 AM
Update: Writer's block. Go to Comment
The Mask that Grins and Lies
Items  (Clothes)   (Cursed)
Strolen's comment on 2011-05-14 12:33 PM


Yeah, basically...I want more!!



You had me hooked. Awesome intro and great mood set. Now I just want a few details on how you invision it and how to use. As is I can definitely do some things with it but I want your spin. On target, just want to be spoon fed a little bit more! Feed me more blood!


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The Mask that Grins and Lies
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EchoMirage's comment on 2011-05-19 02:44 AM


It follows the classic "One Ring" path of an useful item corrupting the owner. The write-up is allright. I'd like to hear more history and reason behidn the item, and something to tell it apart from all the other "boon-then-damnation" items.


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The Mask that Grins and Lies
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Cheka Man's comment on 2011-05-15 08:40 AM


I wonder who created it? 4/5


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The Mask that Grins and Lies
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valadaar's comment on 2011-05-18 05:57 PM


This is really cool - nicely done!


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The Mask that Grins and Lies
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RGTraynor's comment on 2011-05-12 06:04 PM
Nice flavor text.  What's the deal behind it?  (Withholding vote pending completion.)

(EDIT: And there we go ... deal! A good, solid idea.) Go to Comment
The Mask that Grins and Lies
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RGTraynor's comment on 2011-05-15 03:40 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
The Mask that Grins and Lies
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MysticMoon's comment on 2011-05-12 06:31 PM


This makes a really excellent introduction. I have an inkling of what the mask does and how it operates. The tone of horror is conveyed really well.



I am left with a few questions, though. What does it look like? What is its history? Does it grant powers to the wearer or just whisper suggestions?


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The Mask that Grins and Lies
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MysticMoon's comment on 2011-05-14 09:06 PM


This is much improved! I believe you answered most of my questions. I'm still curious to know its history (just because I'm a curious sort), but I think the added bits make it much easier to use in a game.


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The Mask that Grins and Lies
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PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2011-07-17 07:46 PM


Wonderful description, great item, not overly powerful, interesting enough to inspire someone. A great submission.


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Incarnate Ascension
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Dozus's comment on 2011-05-09 08:48 AM


Wow, complex. I'll need to take some time to read and think through this before I vote.



Might I suggest you combine this with the more "artisitc" Shattering sub? I feel like both are lacking something, and the something would seem to be each other. This is highly functional with little artistic flair, and the other is all style with little substance. Don't get me wrong, I think the ideas presented here are really interesting, but I think you leave something to be desired in terms of organization.


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Incarnate Ascension
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axlerowes's comment on 2012-02-12 06:37 PM


I agree with Dozus on the linking. If a shard is a reality/universe what have you, how an incarnate gain the "power" of several shards.   How much power does an incarnate have over the reality.  


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Incarnate Ascension
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Ted's comment on 2011-05-09 02:46 PM
I'll link the two together. Go to Comment
Incarnate Ascension
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Ted's comment on 2011-05-20 10:11 PM
Update: 4, E added. This is directly because of the The Registers submission. Go to Comment
Incarnate Ascension
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Dossta's comment on 2013-03-12 05:01 PM
This could be a very compelling religious system, if it answered a few more questions. First, is this the actual reality of the universe, or just something taught by a religious sect? Second, if this is reality, how aware are the people of the varying shards? Do they have legends about other shards? Are there accounts of visitors from nearby shards?

Could make a really interesting game, but it's a bit too "high-concept" to really make it to the table. Go to Comment
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