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The Registers
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Ted's comment on 2011-06-07 02:50 AM
Update: Writer's block. Go to Comment
The Mask that Grins and Lies
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Strolen's comment on 2011-05-14 12:33 PM


Yeah, basically...I want more!!



You had me hooked. Awesome intro and great mood set. Now I just want a few details on how you invision it and how to use. As is I can definitely do some things with it but I want your spin. On target, just want to be spoon fed a little bit more! Feed me more blood!


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The Mask that Grins and Lies
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EchoMirage's comment on 2011-05-19 02:44 AM


It follows the classic "One Ring" path of an useful item corrupting the owner. The write-up is allright. I'd like to hear more history and reason behidn the item, and something to tell it apart from all the other "boon-then-damnation" items.


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The Mask that Grins and Lies
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Cheka Man's comment on 2011-05-15 08:40 AM


I wonder who created it? 4/5


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The Mask that Grins and Lies
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valadaar's comment on 2011-05-18 05:57 PM


This is really cool - nicely done!


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The Mask that Grins and Lies
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RGTraynor's comment on 2011-05-12 06:04 PM
Nice flavor text.  What's the deal behind it?  (Withholding vote pending completion.)

(EDIT: And there we go ... deal! A good, solid idea.) Go to Comment
The Mask that Grins and Lies
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RGTraynor's comment on 2011-05-15 03:40 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
The Mask that Grins and Lies
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MysticMoon's comment on 2011-05-12 06:31 PM


This makes a really excellent introduction. I have an inkling of what the mask does and how it operates. The tone of horror is conveyed really well.



I am left with a few questions, though. What does it look like? What is its history? Does it grant powers to the wearer or just whisper suggestions?


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The Mask that Grins and Lies
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MysticMoon's comment on 2011-05-14 09:06 PM


This is much improved! I believe you answered most of my questions. I'm still curious to know its history (just because I'm a curious sort), but I think the added bits make it much easier to use in a game.


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The Mask that Grins and Lies
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PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2011-07-17 07:46 PM


Wonderful description, great item, not overly powerful, interesting enough to inspire someone. A great submission.


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Incarnate Ascension
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Dozus's comment on 2011-05-09 08:48 AM


Wow, complex. I'll need to take some time to read and think through this before I vote.



Might I suggest you combine this with the more "artisitc" Shattering sub? I feel like both are lacking something, and the something would seem to be each other. This is highly functional with little artistic flair, and the other is all style with little substance. Don't get me wrong, I think the ideas presented here are really interesting, but I think you leave something to be desired in terms of organization.


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Incarnate Ascension
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axlerowes's comment on 2012-02-12 06:37 PM


I agree with Dozus on the linking. If a shard is a reality/universe what have you, how an incarnate gain the "power" of several shards.   How much power does an incarnate have over the reality.  


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Incarnate Ascension
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Ted's comment on 2011-05-09 02:46 PM
I'll link the two together. Go to Comment
Incarnate Ascension
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Ted's comment on 2011-05-20 10:11 PM
Update: 4, E added. This is directly because of the The Registers submission. Go to Comment
Incarnate Ascension
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Dossta's comment on 2013-03-12 05:01 PM
This could be a very compelling religious system, if it answered a few more questions. First, is this the actual reality of the universe, or just something taught by a religious sect? Second, if this is reality, how aware are the people of the varying shards? Do they have legends about other shards? Are there accounts of visitors from nearby shards?

Could make a really interesting game, but it's a bit too "high-concept" to really make it to the table. Go to Comment
Lydecker Cain, The Universe That Was
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Pieh's comment on 2011-03-25 11:38 PM


I have no idea what I just read. What is this? How is this to be used? Is Cain a planet? A universe? Something like Gaia, or Mother Earth, is how this feels, but we have no real idea what this is. It reads like a creation myth of religious significance, but falls short of explaining anything to a useable degree. Withholding vote until I figure this one out.


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Lydecker Cain, The Universe That Was
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EchoMirage's comment on 2011-03-26 08:36 AM


I join in Pieh's confusion.



It sounds like something from Warren Ellis, albeit with less clarity.



I too am withholding my vote.


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Lydecker Cain, The Universe That Was
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axlerowes's comment on 2011-05-12 11:01 AM


 



I like this one, yet at the same time acknowledge everyone critiques as accurate and valid.  I agree this write up makes no sense and relies so much on the suggestion of information as to be almost devoid of information, yet I think it tells a story and sets a tone.  The contradictions (though some them may be typos) and the gaps only help to set that tone and they tell you about what is unknown and as well as known.



 



Many world views ascribe to the forces of nature personalities.  Indeed, some world view personify everything, now that is not the way the actual universe works, but what if it was?  <b> What if thought was indeed to the core of existence?  Then nothing could exist without thought? </b>  If that was the case then everything that is or was could be traced back to a thinking being.  I think, and maybe I have it wrong, this is the type of the universe describe here.   And if this is the case then the human form is not just a product of evolution (or not at all a product of evolution) but a product of an intellect (in this case existence and the universe that was), and this would explain the human centric nature of the universe and why it is personified as an old man. 



 



I think I understand it  I think it is daring and interesting take on roleplaying.   


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Lydecker Cain, The Universe That Was
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Ted's comment on 2011-03-25 05:23 PM
Update: Oops, HTML/BBCode Goof Go to Comment
Lydecker Cain, The Universe That Was
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Ted's comment on 2011-05-01 08:56 AM
Update: Hopefully with The Shattering submitted, this will make more sense to you guys. Go to Comment
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