Wow, the first time i read this I thought you had some formating issue, then I thought you just edited this badly, and I was preparing long detailed a critique about how some paragraphs didn't make sense. I was even going to mention how your footnotes weren't working as superscripts. Then I realized that the damn scribe ruled me again.
Damn clever sir, it is amazing how you turned this around with out much effort, it made me realize what a great core you had to this idea.
The Positive: I like this! It's a solid, interesting idea with a lot of detail. I can see how it fits into and illuminates your world.
The Negative: The text is a bit verbose. If you're bringing your reader along on a lengthy ride, you should give more of a payoff along the way: Some sort of a twist or surprise would really add to the piece.
The Constructive: What amazing benefits might arise from Corran's Scribe? What awkward revelations might the scribe bring forth? Whose sinister designs might require just such an object? What tales might it best fit into?
*Throws hands up in a fit of rage* I don't know why in bloody hell it refuses to accept the entire submission, but I'm sick of trying to get it to work. I'll come back to this and fix it another time.
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Managed to fix it without any formatting. Sometimes I hate the html editor on this site Strolen.