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David Branch, Cult Leader
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Scrasamax's comment on 2012-02-25 06:20 PM
He's a witch! burn him!!! Go to Comment
David Branch, Cult Leader
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Phaidros's comment on 2012-02-27 05:15 PM
Nice character, with a nice Call of Cthulhu vibes; but posting character stats? Bad Mojo, dude.

The character makes an interesting villain, but to get rid of the demon, he either has to totally redeem himself, or find a bigger demon..... Go to Comment
David Branch, Cult Leader
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Chaosmark's comment on 2012-02-25 09:56 AM


I like how this one turned out. The character makes good, solid sense. His capabilities match his backstory, and so do his flaws. I especially appreciate that he's not an idiot, and recognizes the treachery of Azoxul.



Overall, a rather effective cult leader.


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David Branch, Cult Leader
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Murometz's comment on 2012-02-25 07:29 PM
now that is an interesting question. I say he would. He strikes me as a good-guy at heart. Go to Comment
David Branch, Cult Leader
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axlerowes's comment on 2012-02-25 11:15 AM


IN GAME STATS!   How brazen, how shamelss, my hands are shaking I felt so dirty reading this.  (And GURPS too, you are such a rebel)  Everyone else has been posting softcore, just beneath the sheets we can see the outlines of movement bonuses,  esoteric and specific in game benifets such as "iron stomach" and stat details such as low willpower but high dexterity.  WARNING INFESTED-JERK JUST BROUGHT US A FULL FRONTAL RPG CHARACTER! 



Overall:



I agree with CM a decent cult leader, if it were my idea  I would like to hear about his childhood or time prior to to his demon-joined cult leader and a little more about his inter personal style but the theme of his behavior comes through.  And the disadvantages tell us a lot about the mechanics  of dealing with him.  



How do you want the player characters to feel about him? 



 

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David Branch, Cult Leader
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axlerowes's comment on 2012-02-25 06:48 PM
If Branch had an out would he take it? Go to Comment
David Branch, Cult Leader
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axlerowes's comment on 2012-02-27 06:12 PM
What would he be willing to give up for that out? Go to Comment
David Branch, Cult Leader
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valadaar's comment on 2013-04-28 09:10 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
David Branch, Cult Leader
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Ted's comment on 2012-02-25 03:50 PM
Hopefully, David can come across as affable, someone who doesn't really seem like the kind of guy who is running a doomsday cult. When he's in his element, his charisma and wit tend to make him likeable and popular.

Of course, this is tempered by his psychopathy and the fact that he's being corrupted by Azoxul.

Hopefully during play I can temper his outward appearance with just enough discrepancies to creep players out. Go to Comment
David Branch, Cult Leader
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Ted's comment on 2012-02-25 09:21 PM
Branch is actively seeking the means to rid himself of Azoxul- by digging himself deeper, hoping he can find a means to overpower the demon. If he was provided an out, he would definitely take it, although convincing him would probably hinge on finding a way around his paranoia and megalomania. Go to Comment
David Branch, Cult Leader
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Ted's comment on 2013-04-28 09:54 PM
It was intended as a direct reference to the Branch Davidians from the start. Go to Comment
David Branch, Cult Leader
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MysticMoon's comment on 2012-03-01 04:54 PM
I like the character (although I first misread the title as Branch Davidians.) Good, mostly 3 dimensional, and definitely usable as a villain or uncertain ally. Overall an improvement.

I dislike the stats mixed in with the meat of the sub. Personally (for whatever that's worth) I'd prefer them added as an idea at the end. I haven't looked at GURPS in years so the stats mean nothing to me. Go to Comment
Corran's Scribe
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Murometz's comment on 2012-02-18 12:35 PM


The foot-notes are a riot! I enjoyed this immensely. Clever, creative, detailed. I missed most of the formatting issues and updates you seemed to be having, but it sure it sure looks good now! The mystery of the liquid is a nice touch as well. A humorously classic duo, Corran and Bethany.


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Corran's Scribe
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axlerowes's comment on 2012-02-08 07:03 AM


 



This one started out really well, we have another amusing story of Beth and Corran, and we have the imagery of Corran with a Doc Brown style colander on his head. But the end result of the item is one that is dull, inaccessible and unnecessarily limited.   I was surprised you end with this



“However, the Scribe does not work for other users. Believed to be a problem with the collector assembly and its compatibility with Corran's thoughts specifically, all attempts to modify the Scribe to accommodate another user have failed.”



How about giving the hand a little personality, a little bit of that puckish mischievousness that often seems to grow out of Corran’s quiet and domestic ambitions.   You could give the hand some of Bethany’s traits so that it will change the wording to fit her sensibilities.  Perhaps Bethany is more polite than Corran. 



“I am not writing the phrase ‘demonic crap box’, how about ‘an item from my privy’.” 



Or perhaps Bethany has a little more attitude then Corran.



“I am not addressing Veracit as ‘his Grace’ I don’t care how many Dukedom’s he is granted.  I shall instead write ‘Mr. Veracit who stayed at our home for 6-months without offer of rent or compensation’.”



I know I could change it if I use it and I will, but I would let my players have a go with this. It be could useful for a mage so that they can be sure to take notes while working on spells. I would also give the hand a bit of personality.  

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Corran's Scribe
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axlerowes's comment on 2012-02-09 05:40 PM
I could imagine this scribe system being used to create a mimic of somebody else's handwriting. Perhaps a key piece of evidence in a case of treason was generated by somebody using a hand like this. Imagine if Iago had one of these made with Desdemona's hand.

But perhaps Corran could use it for marital instead martial power plays,
"I am sorry Beth but I have the shopping list right here in your hand writing and eye of newt isn't on it." Go to Comment
Corran's Scribe
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axlerowes's comment on 2012-02-17 09:23 PM


Wow, the first time i read this I thought you had some formating issue, then I thought you just edited this badly, and I was preparing long detailed a critique about how some paragraphs didn't make sense.  I was even going to mention how your footnotes weren't working as superscripts. Then I realized that the damn scribe ruled me again.



 



Damn clever sir, it is amazing how you turned this around with out much effort, it made me realize what a great core you had to this idea.     


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Corran's Scribe
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axlerowes's comment on 2012-02-17 09:28 PM
I am sorry I said without much effort, i just noticed what you went through editing this thing. I laughed out loud while reading this and had to try and explain it to my wife. Thank you for this, I really enjoyed it. Go to Comment
Corran's Scribe
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axlerowes's comment on 2013-04-01 04:42 PM
Corran's Scribe
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axlerowes's comment on 2013-04-29 09:41 PM
now its perfect Go to Comment
Corran's Scribe
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Wulfhere's comment on 2012-02-09 05:22 PM


The Positive: I like this!  It's a solid, interesting idea with a lot of detail.  I can see how it fits into and illuminates your world.



The Negative: The text is a bit verbose.  If you're bringing your reader along on a lengthy ride, you should give more of a payoff along the way:  Some sort of a twist or surprise would really add to the piece.



The Constructive:  What amazing benefits might arise from Corran's Scribe?  What awkward revelations might the scribe bring forth?  Whose sinister designs might require just such an object?  What tales might it best fit into?


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