Drow-like and chaotic. There's an added bonus in that any history records are expected to be flawed, so if you make a mistake, you can just play it off.
This part though;
Lorintand’s Guarshan posed no threat, they were above the petty disputes of the Noble Houses so their allegiance and honor remained intact as long as they served faithfully till the end. This was the end of the Noble House Lorintand and their oath would move to the best offer.
I don't get it, how are they supposed to serve faithfully till the end if they don't lift a finger to protect her? Serve the city then? Go to Comment
Good to see some Decathros lovage! I love how this place is a political minefield and the wrong social step can mean the destruction of centuries worth of aristocracy. I can imagine pc's coming into Vartanadel under the authority of one of the lords, but if they act the wrong way it can mean the ruin of that lord; this would give plenty of opportunity to show off your roleplaying skills.
I had big plans for the mines in my Decathros game :D Go to Comment
I was reading this enjoying it as an afterthought until I began reading about the political influence the mines hold. I actually found myself getting angry at how the mines work and regardless of their actual profit or work load it is up to the whim of a sycophant that decides how the "money" flows.
I began having ideas of a arrogant, thoughtless, young, hotheaded (you know the type that bucks authority) coming into power of his house from some fateful reason and going to his families mine and overseeing its production first hand and bringing full proof to the masses about the truth of how the "Money" flows.
Assassination attempts, toppled houses, and riots could ensue if well planned and thought out. Interesting plot idea especially if the players are thrown into it to protect the noble family or to kill said family. Or both. Go to Comment
This fantastic, I am so glad you wrote you and I am very pleased that I read it. I have to critique to offer this excellent write up, so I will just offer pointed praise. First I really appreciate and respect that you chose to present this an in world perspective. I think this is bit of departure for you, things aren't written in "crayon" here, we trust this information as much as we trust our narrator, and our narrator obviously has some hard feeling. But I think this slanted view also provides us with more information that a list of facts. It give us This is also so much better than an arrogant write up that comes out in an omnipotent third person voice and says something along the lines of "the king is kind and dull witted". We get experience this culture as we might experience any foreign land: with a mix prejudice, confusion, emotion and wonder. No culture in the real world can be seen without perspective and shouldn't we respect our game worlds just as much if we are aiming for verisimilitude?
I love this location so much I wrote up an entire location dedicated Vartanadel exiles. Go to Comment
This was my new test edit post. If everything in the citadel was going to be written over, I wanted it to be better than the graphic upload test. So those ddd were leftover from my test editing phase.
And I do want to spend more time on this. I needed a quick sub to test the submission scripts so used this. There are at least two more subs coming associated with this. When I bring those out, I will update this to give it a little more flavor. Go to Comment
I am a big fan of Vartanadel, perhaps its biggest fan. Indeed the Spiked sea is just Vartanadel fan fiction. So know there is much to this and a lot more to the society in your mind. Perhaps you might consider several small write ups. This could be a write up on the Naming. I also realize that this was submitted in a time of transition at the citadel, and perhaps you are not able to give all of your love. I enjoyed what was here, am glad you submitted it, and thinks the culture outlined provides lot of avenues for plot development and allegory. Go to Comment
Solid idea and write-up. I can see the set-up of this society (with the Naming and all) will lead to a lot of intrigues and plots although I must say I personally never like pieces with so much political 'fickleness' implied. I was going to vote for a 3 but then decided against voting at all in case my personal bias will lead me to vote less objectively than I otherwise would.
Also, for some reason, you've got ddd attached in 2 places at the end of your words, once in the summary and once in the first heading