I said dwarf a bunch of times, lots...and they live in a cave with a big door. What more could you possibly need?! What, do you think Hobbits could be substituted? Blasphemy.

Also, according to the Babel Fish in my ear, reading Troachoar means "This is Dwarven so don't knock it that it can be used for other things too even if seems like it can it really can't and is really for Dwarves and concentrated on Dwarves, Dwarves, Dwarves and it says Dwarves a lot."

The actual translation says Dwarves a lot more but I paraphrased.

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This fit perfectly with an adventure I was working on. I anticipated a demon or something hiding in the city, but a creature without an agenda other than to exist is brilliant. Go to Comment

Lost dwarven colony? I love it. I'm sure there are plenty of other possible explanations too - I'll have to go to my own mines to find one. Go to Comment

I like the set-up! Its old-school yet makes me want to go adventuring asap to help the dwarves! The Roanoke twist only adds to the sense of sinister mystery. The "creature" is also fascinating. I don't know why, but immediately after reading this, I thought of combining The Devourer of Here, Moon's Sound Elemental, P-p-p-p-p-pktt and the Forge of Woe to try to explain this alien "entity" to PCs Go to Comment

It may lack dwarven detail as you say, but the premise oozes dwarvism.

The fact that it can be played with any ethnic group, only adds to its usefulness.

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The premise isn't Roanoke. The premise, as i see it, is a closed dwarven city, beset by mystery, which begs exploration. Almost a LotR vibe. Can picture the PCs approaching a door in the mountain...speak friend and enter. He did also say "dwarves" a lot.
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I like the format and the setup a lot. I think you setup is strong: giving the short anecdote about the city, which is interesting, and draws us in. You then discuss the your personal inspiration behind it which places things it in a larger context. Finally you give us a couple of possible explanations of the event and possible game scenarios. The whole setup involves the reader more than many and is well designed for gaming implementation.  Go to Comment

I like the plot and all but I am shocked and according to my thesaurus I am also be stupefied, startled, astonished, bewildered and suffering from discomfiture that my illustrious guild leader Muro has not pointed out the lack of dwarven detail in this here sub.

By the beards of latent anti-slavic sentiment, the above plot could be played with any ethnic group or race profile and I say if we are to have the pretense of guilds as a sub-game to the citadel than let us give that pretense the obnoxious voice of self-importance and rigid genre requirements. Go to Comment

You're stretching sir, oozes dwarvism says thee, tis a premise based on a lost british colony. Are dwarves a metaphor for the hubris of colonialism? Perhaps the suggestion of a community traveling deeper and deeper into the earth in search of riches and thus isolating themselves from the outer world or disturbing a demon in the deep brings us full circle to tolken. But have a missed another pore through which dwarvism is flowing?

 "The fact that it can be played with any ethnic group, only adds to its usefulness" Ah you are sneaky one Muro, This statement is a moot rhetorical distraction, I asked not if it was useful, (or good or entertaining or interestin, for it is all these) I asked if it is dwarven.

 But if the guild lord commands me to accept this as dwarven than I shall, I will be a Starbuck to your Ahab in this matter. You still say its dwarven?

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The setup is really written, the dwarves coming and going and then sealing the place with explosives or the like is a great touch.

We all know that dwarves seem to have a habit of delving too deep for their own good. Go to Comment

I haven't hit ore for a long time, you have to allow me some fool's gold before I give you the full battle axe. Go to Comment

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Why does he hate them? Go to Comment

His key-beard of unlocking is pure gold!! Can picture him walking up to an intricate triple-locked door. His hanging whiskers animate and dive into two key-holes like moray eels, squirming around. His beard meanwhile, (i picture it golden-blonde for some reason), contorts itself into a bizarre key-like form and enters the third key-hole. His eyes roll back into his head....clack, clack, click.

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This strikes me as fairly complete post (not much wanting for content here), written with a consistent tone and flippant style that is fun to read. We don't learn much about Tornfurry's other side, or if he has one, but I am thinking this is more about the rage than the man. Go to Comment

This is pretty cool - if a little hard to follow. The magic beard - I agree completely with Muro there. Go to Comment

A solid NPC, and one that I feel more than a little sorry for. Another possible plot hook would be a quest to break Tornfury's curse, and expose Niavon's meddling. Go to Comment

Overall, a good sub. I personally would like to see less of the dwarfish sayings, so that the meaning is clearer. If you want, keep some of them in there, to spice the whole thing up, but clarity should be kept. And for me, the beard of unlocking, while a good idea (and I'm probably going to steal it at some point), just doesn't fit the picture of a dwarf who goes on berserk rages to slaughter elves. Tornfury isn't exactly the stealth type. It would be more realistic to give him a power to automatically bust doors down with one kick, even if its magically reinforced.
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I am turning on the negative votes again. ;) Go to Comment

No speaking troll in the comment section. Go to Comment