Very well written, and I like the twist you put on him. I like that not only is he a fallen paladin, but we know why, and what he's doing now. Very detailed description. Well done. Go to Comment
Just one big smile with this one. There are quite a few ideas about using bias against the PCs but to go a step farther and have this Orc use it against them is just great! Go to Comment
This character has a built in plot, a strong motivation, and a twist that makes it a bit different. Two thumbs and a tail up.
What will he do when encountering other orcs? And how will he make this fly against an adventuring party who has the best chance in actually determining if he/she is cursed and counter magics to change her. Go to Comment
Interesting points. I'd imagine that, if confronted by other Orcs, Utrik would either play the part of the stereotypical Orc fighter, then slip away as soon as possible, perhaps trying to pass off his possessions as booty or loot. In the case of the adventurers - well, if the party mage isn't buying the story, it's down to the GM to convince the others. "Ah, but the results of a Detect Magic spell aren't guaranteed", or "Perhaps it's a Clerical curse rather than a spell." Conflict in the party could offer some very enticing opportunities for Utrik... Go to Comment
Just the sort of thing that could make my players poison my pizza, but I'll take the risk...
I occurs to me that in a world where the ability to detect magic is common, minor magical items that could screw things up would also be more common (e.g.: When he expects that he might be 'scanned' by a mage, he'll pull out a potion before the encounter and chug it, causing him to radiate magic...) Go to Comment
Dreadfully awesome! Hey, if this were a movie I guess The ROCK would make a decent fit. Just trying to put a faces on this tortured soul. Go to Comment
I enjoy the role reversal a lot. Elves in the mountains? Dwarves in the woods? What is going on?
It would be a fun place to 'warp' your characters too as well. Let them flounder a little and try and figure out what is going on.
Other reasons to visit:
Legend/Myth/Prophecy tells of a magic item built from an island mountain..etc. Could tie in the prophecy "Elves in the Mountain, Dwarves in the Wood, Humans dying out, all for the good" or something. It obviously wouldn't make too much sense till they got there somehow or hear of it. Rumors from a human that made the trek to the mainlad and nobody believes the mad ramblings of him.
Perhaps humans have been trading with the mainland for awhile but have kept is secret. Ships always given incorrect destinations when they leave and then go to this island. Players need a ride to fake destination. Couldn't be dissuaded. Humans were going to kill the PCs but they couldn't or the PCs convinced them otherwise. Now they are introduced to new land few know about.
Might want to make some kind of valuable export to the land to make a reason for people wanting to find the place. It is fun having it just there and if you are going to use it as an adventure on only the island, that would be great. But I would probably use it as an addition to my world and to do that there has to be a reason for exploration. The metal the elves mine, some of it may have made it through some kind of trade with the humans. It is like the gold rush in the US. Everyone hears rumors of where to find it and make a dash. The person who finds it will be rich beyond imagination... Go to Comment
Great setting, very original. There's a lot you can do with this. Excellent description and background. I want to hear more about Vernae, seems you got a good thing going here. Post some adventures and characters. Go to Comment
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