I don't remember this when initially posted. I do not know how it slipped the radar.
Do not dispair if you don't get a number of comments. This is fairly self contained and you hit upon all the really good future plot hooks. There is little to add or build off of. It is a fairly basic plot with some interesting elements. We tend to either bag on really awful plots and ignore good self contained plots. Go to Comment
Now who voted a 5/5 for this character? It is not directly bad, but leaves much to be desired yet.
Dareth _has_ potential to be great, but it could be shown a bit more. ;)
The complicated background is done well, though it requires many wizards in a game world, particularly wizards 'fallen down from the pedestal', so to speak. No serious Gandalf types here. On the other hand, does he really want to meet his true parents? It looks like he could easily find them...
Second, why would an ancient and reknown guild want an apprentice with such problems in its ranks?
Oh, and for the spells: no need to be detailed, but let us at least know what kind of magics he uses, or likes to use.
If I would vote now, I would give it a 2/5. Let's see what happens with this character. Go to Comment
Well, on the whole, I am not impressed. To be painfully honest, there is nothing about this character to set him apart from the rest of the prodigal sons who populate fantasy. Is it a requirement that a wizard/hero must come from a broken home or razed village (preemtive rant strike)
On the other hand, apart from being rather lack luster, there is nothing at all wring with him.
Thanks for the comments, this is my first post.
I tried not to make an uber character, more of an average person for the PC's to interact with, an unlikely person to lead them to other adventures and some skirmishes in cities. He made a fun companion for my group, leading them into a lengthy adventure with the Guild. I'll post it as a plot once I have a chance to type it all up.
The reason so many characters are wizards is that in my game world, magic is very common in the east, where Dareth is from. Some of the npc's can be switched to other classes to make things more compatiable. Go to Comment
A common mistake when writing adventures set in deserts is to assume that the climate is too ferociously hot to wear armor. Historically, most battles in deserts involved troops dressed in protective armor. Although they would have been miserable during the hottest part of the day or the hottest part of the year, desert weather isn't intolerably hot 24/7.