Linguistic mechanics aside, I suggest clarifying powers of the blade, and their consequences and conditions of use.

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Hey there
two comments:

a) do not write in flight. Bide time in your work to polish it.
b) numerous other authors have English as their second, third etc language. If you need help, get it from either someone on your side of the net, or from a Strolenite. Again, invest effort, it will show in the quality of the piece. Go to Comment

First thing first. Organization and grammar. Your submission is difficult to read due to your formatting and grammar mistakes. I'd suggest breaking it up into smaller paragraphs, and carefully looking at how your sentences are composed.

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English is a very hard language. I'd suggest reading as much english writing as possible (strolen.com can help!)- it will help your own compositions. Go to Comment

We all work hard on our subs, many of us taking days or weeks to get them just right. I'm sure you can too! A little extra effort, maybe letting it sit for a day or two while you think it over, can really help.

Like Echo said, don't write in flight, it results in quick, rushed work, that really will only get a bad reception.

And there are plenty of people who can help you with your language translation, all you need do is ask. Go to Comment

I concur with Infested Jerk. Print it out on a sheet of paper and read it aloud to yourself or better yet have a friend read it to you. 

This item does not seem cursed, typically a cursed item has some sort of detrimental effect on the wielder.

Is Damon Lord a person, or do you mean Deamon? 

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i write this in "flight" when i have time, piece by piece . english is my second language , i think it will always be grammar mistakes ... 

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