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Michael Jotne Slayer's comment on 2011-02-24 03:44 PM


BUMP and HoH. If you enjoy this piece, go see Qacha's Neck as well.


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Mourngrymn's comment on 2011-07-20 12:03 AM


By shear volume and size this is fantastic and can easily be printed out and thrown into my towns/ villages folder for use on a random day.



1) Is there a town watch? Militia? Gaurds of some sort? I see where they are mentioned but a short detail would be nice.



2) This was stated prevously about the "bad". What bad has happened here? A riot perhaps in the Cracked Mug Tavern?



3) A few important or personal nps's would be nice, other than just the owner of this store, etc. A short description of a few of them that any players may come into contact with would be nice.



4) Also a few plot hooks would be well worth the effort.



Just a few basic ideas. I realize this is an older sub, and for a first sub this was grand indeed. Wish I would have caught it back when it was first put up.


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Murometz's comment on 2008-05-15 07:31 PM
Let me add to the accolades. Great work! Reminds me of my first sub :)

Most other pertinent comments have been made already.

Great to have you on board, Sil! Go to Comment
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Drackler's comment on 2008-04-29 08:23 PM
Exretemely well written and fleshed out. Welcome to the Citadel, Silveressa. Go to Comment
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axlerowes's comment on 2012-11-10 08:27 PM
This has a very classic D&D type feel to it. As a resource it is well put together and well organized. Go to Comment
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valadaar's comment on 2008-04-28 07:36 PM
For a first sub, this is very, very good. There is a lot of creativity packed in here!

I do find that some of the sentences are to me, overlong. I've been reading a book, 100 things a Writer should know, and one of the comments there - which is also popular with another Strolenite Moonhunter - is to read sentences aloud to yourself while editing. Those which seem too long will stand out to you.

Other that then, this is an excellent first effort - and the sentence length could just be me :) Go to Comment
Silver Oak
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Stephie's comment on 2008-05-11 07:23 PM
I think this is a fabulous submission! You put a lot of detail into this submission. Great job! Go to Comment
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Silveressa's comment on 2008-04-28 08:21 PM
I plan on submitting a lay out of the Serpents Teeth mountains separately sometime in the near future, and thanks for the suggestion on fleshing out the tree a bit more and tossing it in as a separate submission , I just might do so ;) Go to Comment
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Silveressa's comment on 2008-04-28 08:31 PM
Updated: Changed sentence structure to be more concise and reworded a few things to remove run on sentences. Go to Comment
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Silveressa's comment on 2008-05-03 11:53 PM
Updated: Major Update with a listing of the months and seasons and how the communities lifestyles changes during each one. Go to Comment
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Silveressa's comment on 2008-04-29 11:27 AM
Updated: Clarified it's proximity to current trade routes, it's size compared to surrounding population centers, and fleshed out the blacksmith and leather worker a bit more to cover the source and amount of their raw materials.

Oh and MoonHunter, unfortunately I don't know of any other talented writers that are into rpg's, otherwise I'd eagerly invite them to this site. Go to Comment
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Silveressa's comment on 2008-04-29 04:09 PM
I'm planning on including the Silver Oak as a separate submission entirely in the next couple days, hopefully that should answer anyones questions about it. Go to Comment
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Silveressa's comment on 2011-07-21 05:03 PM
Thanks for the nudge, I'd planned to give this some more attention eventually, but it slipped my mind with other subs and concepts running around.

I'll have to see about another enhancement this weekend! Go to Comment
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Kassy's comment on 2012-06-04 12:12 PM
This! Was your first sub!?

*Stunned*

I really enjoyed it, well done! (Can't believe I missed this one)

4.5/5 + HoH Go to Comment
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RGTraynor's comment on 2011-07-04 03:39 PM


Yay ... I love small villages.  Go oak!


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Ramhir's comment on 2010-12-23 07:36 PM


Very Good Sub! I'm clipping it to use in my campaign. Thanks.


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