Anyway: the text seems to hurry, its melody stumbling in places.
Calling the Familiar 'Lover' was a great idea, having him just summoned not so much. A better tale could be behind the meeting of the two. Go to Comment
This is good. This is very good. I like a good antisocial NPC, and this one a couple of good reasons to be antisocial, and her personality (blunt but kind) fits her backstory.
I also like the part about the familiar's name -- the way you've written it, it could be an quirk or an affectation, or it could be the plain truth (and Isis help whoever walks in on them). Solid support for GM flexibility is a good thing.
I've typed "good" and "like" enough times already, so I'll leave it there. Go to Comment
This seems, well just odd. I opened the page expecting a medical establishment and instead I find cops, firefighters, droning history professors and a sex-changed athletics coach. Heartline EMS, or HLU seems more like a technical college than a University. That aside, police and firefighters have their own institutions for training and testing their applicants, and the drama dept seems rather out of place. Go to Comment
What Scrasamax said -- some of the classes seem out of place in a medical school. (Nightstick training?)
Some of the characters are interesting, in a bit-part sort of way, but they seem inappropriate for the setting. (Again, the ex-SWAT nightstick trainers are the outstanding example.)
The sub seems contradictory at times (Dr. Miller is both infamous and respected, and Ms. Chambers is both slender and voluptuous). Other parts read as vague or opaque (but that might just be a difference in taste).
And then there's the librarian, Ms. Margaret Thatcher. She might speak slowly to compensate for speech impediments resulting from a minor stroke. She also probably only sleeps four hours a day -- the library might be open 24/7, but that doesn't mean that anyone's actually using it at 3 am. (I suggest Wikipedia for more biographical tidbits and a usable picture.)
I don't generally have a problem with this sort of "borrowing." In another, more light-hearted context, I don't even mind if the borrowing is bold and undisguised. In a horror or mystery game, though, I suspect that the mood might suffer. (Also, the players might spend an annoyingly large amount of game time searching for Ronald Reagan and Mikhail Gorbachev.)
On the silver-lining side, a Google search of the other characters led me to ian-miller.org, which has an art portfolio. Go to Comment
It;s a more admittedly light hearted take on a college campus, and not meant to be hard cold and factual. The type of horror rpg this is meant for is more of the b-grade tongue in cheek horror/mystery opposed to the COTC insane mind ripping terror.
Interesting notes on the npc's names, I picked them at random and was surprised to learn Ian Miller had an art portfolio. Go to Comment