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Shek-Ta
NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
valadaar's comment on 2008-05-22 07:30 PM
Wow, really good Silveressa! This is the best in my opinion of the quest entries!

Found one typo of note:

bandits hastily converting on the fearsome

Assuming you mean converging :) Go to Comment
Shek-Ta
NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-05-21 10:05 PM
Updated: fixed the punctuation and word errors. Go to Comment
Shek-Ta
NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-05-22 11:51 PM
Updated: converting changed to converging. Go to Comment
Darkest of Winters
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - In General)
Cheka Man's comment on 2008-05-19 02:21 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
Darkest of Winters
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - In General)
valadaar's comment on 2013-04-26 09:44 PM
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Darkest of Winters
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - In General)
Silveressa's comment on 2011-05-03 12:17 PM
Actually, I think I have a few more chapters of this kicking around on one of my back up drives somewhere, if I can find them I'll toss them later on this month, thanks for the reminder! Go to Comment
Darkest of Winters
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - In General)
Kassy's comment on 2012-06-17 08:43 AM
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Darkest of Winters
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - In General)
klauston's comment on 2012-12-20 09:09 PM
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Darkest of Winters
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MysticMoon's comment on 2011-05-03 11:29 AM


Some good old school post-nuclear-apocalypse with cool mutants. :)



More?


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Another ghost in the graveyard?!
Plots  (Discovery)   (Side-Quest)
manfred's comment on 2008-05-18 04:20 PM
Heh, not all magic academy dropouts make it to adventurers. :)

If you have those magic users, you can occasionally employ them for a purpose like this... few will expect it. Nice one. Go to Comment
Another ghost in the graveyard?!
Plots  (Discovery)   (Side-Quest)
Cheka Man's comment on 2008-05-16 03:15 PM
That would be a good game to GM. Go to Comment
Another ghost in the graveyard?!
Plots  (Discovery)   (Side-Quest)
Michael Jotne Slayer's comment on 2008-08-18 09:58 AM
Good solid idea. Go to Comment
Another ghost in the graveyard?!
Plots  (Discovery)   (Side-Quest)
Ancient Gamer's comment on 2008-05-20 11:39 AM
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Another ghost in the graveyard?!
Plots  (Discovery)   (Side-Quest)
valadaar's comment on 2008-05-17 07:30 PM
This is a solid mini-adventure! Though I am expecting to see the mystery machine make an appearance :)

That said - you have a few missing capitalizations at the start of sentances, and a few spacing issues. There is also still a bit of overlong sentances. Read them aloud to yourself, and if you find yourself running out of breath, rebuild your sentences. Go to Comment
Another ghost in the graveyard?!
Plots  (Discovery)   (Side-Quest)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-05-16 04:52 PM
Updated: Fixed a few small spelling errors Go to Comment
Another ghost in the graveyard?!
Plots  (Discovery)   (Side-Quest)
MysticMoon's comment on 2011-04-19 10:37 PM


A good mystery to throw at the players and watch them try to figure out what's happening.


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Bai Yu (White Death Rain)
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
Cheka Man's comment on 2008-05-15 12:33 PM
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Bai Yu (White Death Rain)
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
Murometz's comment on 2008-05-15 07:41 PM
Ok, I wanted to love this, i did. A mutant mouse is right up my alley. And I think it is a great NPC for a supers game. Heck, its a great PC even.

This starts off great! My only nitpick would be that aside from the fact that a mutant mouse super is a nice, original, idea, her tale, as it unwound, became a bit cliche and a tad generic. Now, I know that a supers background is a supers background, and it fits the bill, but...

I loved the character as I started reading, yet grew more neutral as her story unfolded. It is the type of background that can fit any super.

Geez, I'm not sure I'm being clear here. What I'm trying to say is, I find Bai-Yu a great character, but the story left something to be desired. Hope that made some sense.

Anyhoo, an interesting and oh so usable NPC. And not just supers. She can be dropped into ANY 'weird' modern game really. Kudos.

+.5 for actually making a supers NPC. Moon will love you. Go to Comment
Bai Yu (White Death Rain)
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
valadaar's comment on 2008-05-15 08:03 PM
I have to agree with Muro - to me this feels like a TMNT character and a little generic. You could have said turtle/hamster/whathaveyou and the rest of the background would not need to be altered. How has her life/world view been affected by being an animal? Apart from being the cause of her being cast out, it has little apparent effect. Go to Comment
Bai Yu (White Death Rain)
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-05-15 01:49 AM
Updated: Fixed some minor html coding problems. Go to Comment
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