Not bad - I like it a lot more then your Sci-fie tale. I need to read that one over again befor I give comment.

The wierd characters seem to happen with some 's - for some reason stuff pasted in from Word can sometimes do that.

There are a few technical problems with missing commas and the like, but all in all quite engaging. I hope you reveal more of it! Go to Comment

I'd paste it into a plain text editor (I use Textpad) and then cut and paste it into the sub - that works for me.
I think it is the 'other' quotes that do it. The ` as opposed to the '. Go to Comment

Updated: Fixed the text formatting errors. Go to Comment

Updated: Added in a extra half page of content. Go to Comment

The thing is I pasted that in from notepad so I;m not sure why it;s doing that. Perhaps because I;'m using firefox instead of internet explorer? Any feedback on how to prevent that in the future would be much appreciated. Go to Comment

This is a great opening. Makes me wish there was more.

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(Note: I've added the 'Insect' freetext for you.)

And they are okay. Quite a representative specimen for your dungeon needs. :) Go to Comment

Why did you not link them to this:
Insects (and Spiders and other creepy crawlies) Go to Comment

An interesting part of the ecology. These things don't need a magical or odd origin. They could be 100% natural, though odd, in origin.

I could see these things being bred for larger size and being milked of their chemical bounty. Go to Comment

That's a pretty odd adaptation, but interesting. Maybe not the way I would have done it, but it's definitely a unique challenge for an adventurer. Go to Comment

I think the part that I like about it is that the beetles are not carnivorous, starving for the flesh of man, and instead swarm when threatened and will only return to a corpse days after it's demise to nibble of the muck growing on it. Go to Comment

Owch. It must be a pain getting rid of a nest of these. Go to Comment

This one hits home with me. The imagery was vivid for my part, when a sub makes me try to "see" it in my imagination something about it is good.

With this I imagine a damp dark cave, the walls are slimed with fungus and moss. The very air seems to be humming deep within the mountain. And behold, a light appears in the pitch black, and then another... The cave is soon burning with a hundred candles, revealing a cathedral like roof and a floor littered with brittle bones of former adventurers.

What I miss is more somehow, the basic idea is great. But I feel that their mythology could be expanded. Their options are so many. The colour and flavour" vs "the facts / the essentials" has long drifted in the undercurrents of the Citadel. I personally feel that this needs more flavour.

So in closing, this is a good solid idea that could easily be expanded to much more. Go to Comment

Practical, in terms of gaming. Like the others, I'd like to see them fleshed out a little more, but it's a great idea. Go to Comment

They must be very magical to burn for hours - both to sustain a flame that long and to survive it. Do they have an origin of note? Go to Comment

Interesting creepy crawlie to run into. Go to Comment

I'm just curious about the part where you say these beetles could be a lifesaver in times of need? Did you mean as a source of light, or something else? Go to Comment

Aye, quite magical, but they've got no particular origin I've thought of yet, although that could make for an interesting adventure for a scholar pc or npc ;) (If one could determine it's origin one could perhaps find a more adaptable species to use for alchemical purposes.) Go to Comment

Aye as light, or more as a improvised fire bomb attack.. A canny adventurer could find a relatively easy way to trap a few of them in a bag without too much trouble. Go to Comment

Updated: Updated with details on how these beetles can be used offensively by a savvy (or desperate) adventurer. Go to Comment