Reading a few Ouzquin Dremorix subs beforehand helped me place this in a larger context. Please, please keep writing these subs... I only have a few more before I run out :)
The graphic is really cool.
While this is not a traditional dragon for the fantasy genre, I would argue that a dragon should be a powerful force, elemental or otherwise. To me this sort of cuts to the heart of what a dragon should be about.
I like how the elements of the desert play such an importance in this setting; it seems very fitting.
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Very nice, I especially liked the raven book and this part; "Ahlgru made a great hullabaloo!" That made me smile. When you made your library sub I was hoping you would make the books as well.
As for typos, I really shouldn't even bother in a text that contains words like "dids't". :P
But there were two that broke the pace of the text;
whoever you touch fall alseep instantly (depending on saving rolls).
If you speak this to the doorman he will let you though, but if you try to force or trick your way in
I assume the one in the flavour poem was intentional.