Can you paint an old person young again? Overall, this is an interesting item with a well-written background story (I enjoyed the "voice" of this piece, very much). I do think its powers are a little ambiguous, however, and could use some more fleshing out. Go to Comment
I agree that the concept and rendering of this myth are good, particularly the idea. If you have not done so, read Portrait of Dorian Gray. I would love to see more fleshing out of the items. Why should they have any power? Wasn't it established that it was the artist? Did the artist somehow merge into the tools upon his death? Did he pour himself into his work for so long that he didn't die so much as he was carried into the items?
Mechanically (were talking capitalization, usage, punctuation, and spelling) you drive me nuts. But then again, I teach English (and several other subjects); my starting sanity is justifiably questionable.
I like the concept as a bardic power or something only a unique person might bring about. Go to Comment
One thing I'd point out is that if Red Mui'aan is a fungus, it is NOT a carnivorous plant, it is a fungus. All fungus are carnivorous, or at least heterotrophic, unlike plants, which create their own food, so it is a double fallacy to call Red Mui'aan a "carnivorous plant". Go to Comment
I took the liberty of making a background/description of the Mui'aan fungus, as I thought I should try to make a bit of an explanation for the bloodlust created by the metal. Feel free to make suggestions/alterations/inclusions. I hope this is how you envisioned your metal, Silas. Go to Comment
Here is another thought on what could happen With Imuricum crafted items, plus an addition to this item:
Dormant items - These items are crafted using Imuricum for the superior quality the element gives, but they are are not drenched in any blood.
And example of what could happen because of this?
An Imuricum breastplate could be worn for months, but then during one particularly bloody battle, the blood of a goblin is splattered all over it. Some days/weeks later (the heat was the catalyst of the blood soaking into forged Imuricum items), the owner of the breastplate may feel the urge to hunt goblins again... Go to Comment
Ha! First, thanks for the compliments :) And to answer your thoughts - The element only absorbs the blood of the first creature that touches it. So someone with the "Blade of the mad", for example ( http://www.strolen.com/items/viewitem.php?item_id=286&offset=10&order=updated&dir=Desc&index=1 )
could kill any type of creature he wishes, but still only want to attack humans. Go to Comment
A thought on "pure" Imuricum. Make Adamantine Imuricum alloy. In my world, Adamantite can be sharpened to an unbelievably sharp edge, yet it is very brittle. An Adamantine Imuricum alloy would prove to be just as sharp, but exponentially more durable. Go to Comment
Make bracelets, armbands or chokers: Drench them in the blood of your enemies, then put them on your favorite shock troops (including captured enemies). Spread stories of the magical boost to ferocity, and soak them in blood for a long, long time - then your enemies will wear them as trophies if they kill your shock troops... Go to Comment