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The Art of Healing
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CaptainPenguin's comment on 2004-04-23 10:03 PM
*Takes out his bright green grading pen*

Let's see...
Basic Item Theory: A. Good item. I like it. This category is not part of the myth grade.
Mythical Language: A. Good use of sentence inversion and strategic Old English. The progression of sentences needs work (see the way mythic sentences progress in Boots Too Fine for the Earth)
Myth in General: A-. A little short, but good nonetheless. The item is mythically magical; that is, it was not created by some petty mage. In this case, it was just so excellent that it was magical. That's a good touch.
Myth Length/Myth Progression: B+. Just a little short. Maybe you could have provided more examples of the healing power of Colourshade's works, and not just that one old woman. The way that you provided one example and then left the rest of it to "And so, throughout his life, people came to Colourshade for peace of mind", which makes the myth feel like it has been cut short, somehow.
So...

Overall Item Grade - 4/5.
Overall Myth Grade - A-. Good work. Let's see the rest of you do some myths, yeah? Go to Comment
The Art of Healing
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Shadoweagle's comment on 2004-04-26 07:55 AM
Perhaps.

Perhaps a cruel twist is this: The painter uses inferior quality paints, and after several years the paintings begin to fade and peel away. The one healed by it may find old injuries, which had been healed by the painting, return.

Good quality oil paints will ensure a longevity far surpassing the persons lifetime, though the ones healed wont live longer. Go to Comment
The Art of Healing
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Shadoweagle's comment on 2004-04-23 08:53 PM
A couple things: I am aware that you (silly) Americans/foreigners may spell colour as color, as well as several other words differently, but the Australian way, is 'Colour', so don't berate me for spelling it wrong :) I stick by my nationality.

This is my first hand at Mythical-writing, and I won't be satisfied until Captainpenguin grades me. Go to Comment
The Art of Healing
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Shadoweagle's comment on 2004-04-23 10:12 PM
Mmm, an A-, highest grade Ive gotten since primary school :P

I'm happy with that mark for my first myth, hopefully future myth-writings will be more filled out :) Go to Comment
The Art of Healing
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Bloodredblade's comment on 2005-11-19 06:47 PM
I really enjoy this idea.

On that note, what if there was a twin to the painting set spoken of here? Perhaps someone of evil intent made it, or still better: someone of good intent finds it and tries to make another, but fails, twisting it to a point where it does more damage. This could produce a very good storyline at the end of which both painting utensils are present, and look exactly alike. better still, a friend is dieing, and if you pick the wrong one, you will kill them. just some ideas that this gave me. Go to Comment
The Art of Healing
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valadaar's comment on 2013-06-20 08:57 PM
A fine healing item, wonderfully rendered and perfect for use. One could make the inks require special ingredients for their manufacture, and so employment and riches could be obained in their aquisition.
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The Art of Healing
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valadaar's comment on 2013-06-20 08:57 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
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Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-20 07:23 PM
The myth is excellent and also, I just happen to like all utility item subs. Go to Comment
The Art of Healing
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Dossta's comment on 2013-06-21 12:26 PM
Can you paint an old person young again? Overall, this is an interesting item with a well-written background story (I enjoyed the "voice" of this piece, very much). I do think its powers are a little ambiguous, however, and could use some more fleshing out. Go to Comment
The Art of Healing
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dustyjohnson's comment on 2013-06-22 07:06 PM
I agree that the concept and rendering of this myth are good, particularly the idea. If you have not done so, read Portrait of Dorian Gray. I would love to see more fleshing out of the items. Why should they have any power? Wasn't it established that it was the artist? Did the artist somehow merge into the tools upon his death? Did he pour himself into his work for so long that he didn't die so much as he was carried into the items?

Mechanically (were talking capitalization, usage, punctuation, and spelling) you drive me nuts. But then again, I teach English (and several other subjects); my starting sanity is justifiably questionable.

I like the concept as a bardic power or something only a unique person might bring about. Go to Comment
Imuricum weapon -
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CaptainPenguin's comment on 2004-03-28 12:10 AM
I like.
4/5. Go to Comment
Imuricum weapon -
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Shadoweagle's comment on 2004-03-30 12:30 AM
If it were to end up with someone already insane, the blade would do little more than help that person guide his insanity into attacking people. Go to Comment
Imuricum weapon -
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Obsidian Shadow's comment on 2004-03-29 06:35 PM
A slight twist in this story of yours would be if the blade were to end up in the hands of someone already insane? Just think about it... Go to Comment
Imuricum weapon -
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Silas the Destroyer's comment on 2004-03-24 12:28 PM
Hmmm... Not bad. Not bad at all. Go to Comment
Imuricum
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manfred's comment on 2004-03-24 07:23 AM
It is better than both items made of it together. I like the description, and the pseudo science around it, Looks like it could have some uses...

4/5 Go to Comment
Imuricum
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CaptainPenguin's comment on 2004-03-28 12:09 AM
Usually I would frown on this sort of thing, but this is really good! Go to Comment
Imuricum
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CaptainPenguin's comment on 2005-09-14 07:47 PM
Bumpanomics.
One thing I'd point out is that if Red Mui'aan is a fungus, it is NOT a carnivorous plant, it is a fungus. All fungus are carnivorous, or at least heterotrophic, unlike plants, which create their own food, so it is a double fallacy to call Red Mui'aan a "carnivorous plant". Go to Comment
Imuricum
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Shadoweagle's comment on 2004-03-24 03:21 AM
I took the liberty of making a background/description of the Mui'aan fungus, as I thought I should try to make a bit of an explanation for the bloodlust created by the metal. Feel free to make suggestions/alterations/inclusions. I hope this is how you envisioned your metal, Silas. Go to Comment
Imuricum
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Shadoweagle's comment on 2004-03-24 08:16 PM
Hehe :) Im glad I got it right, then. Go to Comment
Imuricum
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Shadoweagle's comment on 2004-03-24 10:44 PM
Here is another thought on what could happen With Imuricum crafted items, plus an addition to this item:

Dormant items - These items are crafted using Imuricum for the superior quality the element gives, but they are are not drenched in any blood.
And example of what could happen because of this?
An Imuricum breastplate could be worn for months, but then during one particularly bloody battle, the blood of a goblin is splattered all over it. Some days/weeks later (the heat was the catalyst of the blood soaking into forged Imuricum items), the owner of the breastplate may feel the urge to hunt goblins again... Go to Comment
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