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Sila'Khrysath - The Great Sand Wyrm.
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Shadoweagle's comment on 2013-08-22 03:40 PM
Yeah, it was difficult to describe that sound without using more modern explanations :p

I guess I could have said an electrical squeal or something, but it doesn't have quite the same ring. Go to Comment
Sila'Khrysath - The Great Sand Wyrm.
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Scrasamax's comment on 2013-08-29 07:57 AM
Breathtaking.

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Sila'Khrysath - The Great Sand Wyrm.
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Cheka Man's comment on 2013-08-27 02:34 PM
Not something to mess with. Go to Comment
Sila'Khrysath - The Great Sand Wyrm.
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valadaar's comment on 2013-08-27 11:58 AM
Great creature, great selection of images. Love the battery :)

I agree with the Gossamer's point - I would not use the anachronistic description, regardless of its accuracy. Perhaps describe it as an oddly buzzing whistle?

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MysticMoon's comment on 2013-08-29 07:27 AM

Reading a few Ouzquin Dremorix subs beforehand helped me place this in a larger context. Please, please keep writing these subs... I only have a few more before I run out :)

The graphic is really cool.

While this is not a traditional dragon for the fantasy genre, I would argue that a dragon should be a powerful force, elemental or otherwise. To me this sort of cuts to the heart of what a dragon should be about.

I like how the elements of the desert play such an importance in this setting; it seems very fitting.

No question for me: 5/5

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Sila'Khrysath - The Great Sand Wyrm.
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caesar193's comment on 2013-08-21 11:54 AM
An elemental dragon that is occasionally sent to destroy a city, which welcomes the attack? Great job, SE. All of it is great, the origins, the mechanics (the battery fits well into a beast made out of sand and obsidian), its societal role.

Sila'Krysath is an excellent elemental, and very original take on the dragon. So now, as I ponder it, Four questions come to mind: how big are the deserts to contain these beasts? Do they require food, besides sand for their sand-spitting attack? How to the merchants feel about them, with both the attack on Bareka and the dragons wandering around the desert with merchant caravans? Do these dragons have lairs, or have a need for sleep?

I could tack on a fifth question about the typical draconic lust for treasure, but I'd assume God's pet and the elemental of the desert would not need treasure. Besides, from what I gather from the Ouzquin Dremorix, treasure is mainly glass, and that would be too fragile for transport by a dragon.

If this site offered the ability to give 4.75, I'd give it too you, but since it doesn't, and I have a policy of rounding down on votes, I bestow on you a 4.5. Go to Comment
Sila'Khrysath - The Great Sand Wyrm.
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Gossamer's comment on 2013-08-22 03:09 PM
Very interesting, just some minor typos I won't even write up. I have an... observation though.

This part:

"and the sound increased in pitch and volume as though it were an electrical gadget overloading. "

I can understand that it would be hard to find an equivalent of this sound in a more traditional fantasy enviroment, unless your setting has that level of technology?
Up until that point, I was under the impression of a tale told straight out of this world, but that electric gadget observation broke that spell for me. Go to Comment
Sila'Khrysath - The Great Sand Wyrm.
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CrazyF1r3f0x's comment on 2013-08-24 11:54 AM
This is amazing, the story really adds to this as well. I'll definitely remember this for a desert encounter. Go to Comment
Sila'Khrysath - The Great Sand Wyrm.
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CrazyF1r3f0x's comment on 2013-08-24 12:01 PM
Well, instead of focusing on the noise, you could instead focus on the glow, and perhaps the air becomes increasingly hot and humid as the energy level increases; hair stands up on peoples heads, metal conducting items might pull some sparks of energy from Sila'Khrysath's maw ect. Go to Comment
Whitebone Book hunt
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Shadoweagle's comment on 2013-07-22 04:32 PM
A fair call, Caesar. I felt that the plot use of the tomes wasn't given enough detail in the item sub, so I expanded on it in an attempt to give people a coherent start-to-finish reason to actually actively seek and learn more about the tomes. Also, I am using this to expand on Lazarus Lightward - he, and now also Skezemo, will feature in some future quest lines, I think. The next step is to find the fabled Hell Knight!

Also, yes, I will link those subs when im on my computer next, good point :D Go to Comment
Whitebone Book hunt
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valadaar's comment on 2013-08-07 08:12 AM
Not bad, though I've found scripted endings rather unpopular with players.

Added a couple of links for you. Go to Comment
Whitebone Book hunt
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MysticMoon's comment on 2013-09-02 09:21 AM
Ties in nicely with the others. Go to Comment
Whitebone Book hunt
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caesar193's comment on 2013-07-22 02:08 PM
You should probably link your Lazarus. Whitebone Tomes, and Library subs to this, so people who lack the knowledge of your fall into being a Hellstrolenite and the whys and hows of that fall can learn of it.

Other than that, I felt that it was kind of just a repeat of what you had all ready done with the previous Whitebone Tomes sub. It was really just the addition of Lazarus (who, for the purpose of this sub, is the bartender who hands out rumors), a couple of additional ideas for the Tome's locations (the only ones that weren't all ready given as ideas for their locations was the necromancer one and the comatose viking one), and an ending betrayal.

The idea for the betrayal was nice, and the raising of Skezemo is a good one (though I do kind of want to know how it happened- from what I had gathered, Skezemo became part of the library, not the tomes. And the tomes help with summoning demons, and not mortals). The execution, too, is good. But overall, I'd say this is a 3.5 Go to Comment
Whitebone Book hunt
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Gossamer's comment on 2013-07-22 11:17 AM
Nice. Some more background info and motives for Lazarus was the one thing I felt missing. Go to Comment
The Whitebone Tomes
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Shadoweagle's comment on 2013-07-09 07:03 PM
Update: Gotta get this out or ittle just sit forever :p Apologies in advance for grammar/spelling issues. Most of this was done late at night. Go to Comment
The Whitebone Tomes
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Shadoweagle's comment on 2013-07-12 07:14 PM
Thanks moon - I might try that when I get back on a computer :) Go to Comment
The Whitebone Tomes
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Cheka Man's comment on 2013-07-10 12:53 PM
Great power, but dangerous to use for very long. Go to Comment
The Whitebone Tomes
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Mourngrymn's comment on 2014-01-27 05:48 PM
I like this. I found the spacing in some of the paragraphs to be eye hurtful but otherwise found little issues with it. Just when I was looking for something to tie two chapters of my on going game together I find this. It fits well with my current campaign with little altering and I know exactly how to proceed with these. Glad I found this now instead of earlier. Go to Comment
The Whitebone Tomes
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valadaar's comment on 2013-07-10 11:08 AM
Oh, I like this one. Very good with lots of details.

Each book is a plot idea. Perhaps one could link actual adventures serving as actual locations for each book.
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The Whitebone Tomes
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Moonlake's comment on 2013-07-12 06:56 PM
I'm normally not a fan of infernal themed subs, but this one is a nice surprise. I like how the boons and curses linked to each of the books is relatively 'minor' in a sense.

btw, you can and probably should link back to your own scroll on Ngama Ngama in 30 Devils by using the syntax {sub_id#comment_id|Ngama Ngama} where you replace { with [. The sub_id#comment_id can be found when you go back to the 30 Devils sub and then click on the eye icon on your scroll on Ngama Ngama. Not sure whether you know abt the syntax or not so might as well write it down here. Go to Comment
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