Very, very good. I've been working on some glass-related ideas, and this gives me a lot more to work with. I'm thinking of riffing on the Shattered Orb sect - perhaps some of them have migrated to a more conventional city on the edge of the desert, and run a luxury business. Go to Comment
A nice solid item with good plot hooks and dramatic potential. It is also well written. Mostly, it would be a plot device...
Somewhere adn when, some God along the way will try to unleash Goli for their own purposes and help a mortal do it... thus the unleashing a quest to stop the person who is trying to gain that power. Go to Comment
A plot line could be someone wanting to use the trapped god for their own sacrifice. A quick stabbing with one dagger, then a quick stabbing with a god deadly athame (or just killing the virgin host while Goli is trying to gets it powers together). Thus the dagger is part of a greater plot, one in which a deity is playing with the universe itself... trying to sacrifice a god for its own purpose. Can you say dominate the universe? Go to Comment
Wow. I was all set to click 3.5 for this Romeo, until the last paragraph..wow! Insidious!
Hmmmm...What would you get if you crossed Lothario, Don Juan, and Cassanova, with "Dear" John and Demogorgon?
Perhaps at some point, the wronged women find one another, and form a vengeance-cabal of sorts against the lovable Lothario, in essence becoming unknowing demon-hunters. :D These women of influence can make things dicey and difficult for Valdus, as he seeks out further lovers among the nobility. Go to Comment
Not bad, it just... doesn't do it for me. The instant effect that makes anyone your slave, then going out in a suicidal rage. How many people will go out before he is noticed? And once someone other than him knows, how long will it take until it is used against Nurin himself?
Nice write-up and all, just not my thing. Nice to have our evil Archmage back, though! Go to Comment
its manipulative, its deceitful, its the sort of thing we look forward to seeing! I like the beads being of limited quality, perhaps Nurin will have been working on some other things with his unlimited budget, or has he gone completely political? Go to Comment