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axlerowes's comment on 2013-04-09 06:12 PM
Nope. Dossta, I re read my comment and I am sorry. My original comment was unfocused and full of asides and ideas for the plot. It was also really badly written and I am dumber for having reread it. I tried to re write the comment, so it focuses only on what I thought should be changed. Go to Comment
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axlerowes's comment on 2013-04-10 06:10 AM
Et tu Strolen,
first my comment on 4-9-13 was regarding my own comment on this post made on 4-7-13, so I was calling my own writing horrible. It (my comment) was unfocused and rambling


I decided to try and make one point, so edited the comment yesterday. And the suggestion that this should go into the plot was a minor point that has little relevance to what I was trying to say. I am talking about the theology of the cult. But you are right the theology or values of the cult don't have a lot relevance to the actual submission? There in was my point. Go to Comment
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axlerowes's comment on 2013-04-10 01:46 PM
"Join a cult, Small steps, better rewards, before you know it, the PCs release a greater demon."

That is the idea. I think the idea would have more drama and be more engaging as a roleplaying tool if it was

"Join a cult, Smalls step, better rewards and before you know it the PCs WANT MORE than ANYTHING to release a greater demon."

One does not have the write up the theology per se, as we all agree the theology is unimportant to the plot. But what i was suggesting was the there be a line of information or point in the action SE outlined in which the PCs take control of the narrative and the cult. Alternatively, perhaps a point were the PCs have to make choice: great reward or advancement of the cult. Perhaps several small scenes in which the PC interact with Gods, one of the PCs could have the dreams about the Goddess, the PCs could be carriers for the spirits of the demigods. Because right now the PCs don't really have any interaction with the Gods, the demigods are summoned then leave the room (of course having to much NPC time is dangerous to a narrative). I am suggesting a scene or line of the story that causes the PCs to become invested in the cult beyond the stat and material rewards, and beyond the "well we already gone this far" argument.

I like this write up, I really respect and admire the way it is written, I said that i my first comment. I like that you have both a story told in an immersive narrative and the GM voice dialog about why and how the plot should progress. If I wanted to an example of sub with a great voice I would point to this one. I gave it a 4. I will give it HoH.

Yet ou guys are just being awful and defensive, you exaggerating things and setting up these false hyperbolic conditions. What I think I am hearing

"We are here to have fun, to much thought=less fun"

"I am not getting paid to do this, it is "

"You are obtuse (lacking sharpness or quickness of sensibility or intellect ) and missing the point."

I think I get the point, in that SE is not just sharing an idea, he is both telling a story and telling people how to tell a story. I like the story, I like way he told it, but I suggest that the story would be stronger if there was more personal involvement in the story on the part of the protagonist in an RPG. Because right now in the write up it may the actions of the PCs the drive the plot, but they under the direction of the NPCs. And I am just suggesting, I am not saying…well I reserve my vote…or demanding you improve this. I too am trying to articulate an idea. Go to Comment
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valadaar's comment on 2014-06-17 10:36 AM
Yes, holy commentary batman :)

This is an excellent submission, with lots of details and ideas in one place.

As I peruse this immense library that is Strolen's I am constantly impressed by the quality of these hidden gems.

Well done folks! Go to Comment
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Kassy's comment on 2013-03-27 10:10 AM
4.0/5

An enjoyable read, and an idea that I'm sure we've all entertained at some point along the line.

It's still more fun to be on the 'good' side though. Go to Comment
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Dossta's comment on 2013-04-03 01:59 PM
*Low whistle of appreciation* Very, very nice work, Shadow. Of the quest submissions so far, this is by far my favorite. For a solid list of ideas to fill out Level 2, I humbly suggest 40 Thieves Guild Missions by Nobody -- I've found it invaluable as a resource for those kinds of "dirty odd-jobs".

I honestly can't think of anything you need to do to improve this -- the flavor text is fantastic, the quest progression is logical, and the imprisoned goddess is even sympathetic in a way. If I ever end up with another party sliding down the Slippery Slope, I will definitely revisit this. Go to Comment
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Dossta's comment on 2013-04-09 01:11 PM
Would most of your objections here be addressed if this was recategorized to a Plot, rather than a System? I agree that it doesn't fit the System category as well as it could, but the Religions and Cults quest didn't specify a particular category for entries. Go to Comment
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Dossta's comment on 2013-04-10 11:07 AM
The theology of the Cult is not nearly as important as the process the party goes through to climb its ranks. In fact, I would say that by leaving the theology intentionally sparse, Shadow has actually increased the generality and usefulness of this submission.

Let me explain: Eriphen and her two children are nice, but ultimately irrelevant and replaceable. They may not fit into my current campaign world, or they may just not interest me personally. That's alright.

As written, all I need is a trapped deity and two other powerful entities to help free him/her. These can be dragons, powerful mages, alien artifacts, killer robots -- anything that is ultimately far stronger than the players and most of their enemies.

If you look at the pantheons for a lot of published campaign settings, you can probably find one or two lost or trapped gods, goddesses or other mythic beings that you can easily adapt this campaign to. BUT, just in case your world doesn't have an established mythology yet, Shadow provided us with the bones to build one on.

That's quite a lot to accomplish in one sub. Go to Comment
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Dossta's comment on 2013-04-10 02:11 PM
Alright, I think I'm beginning to see your point axle. You aren't so much asking for the theology to be fleshed out, as for more places in the storyline where the theology (such as it is) is relevant.

I agree that the PCs are a little passive here. They follow a list of pre-planned actions at the behest of various NPCs. Aside from the promise of power and wealth, there is little to connect the party to the cult or make them feel like they are a part of something bigger.

Perhaps more interaction with normal cult members would help. Giving the party a strong sense of "family" could be all the motivation needed. It is up to the GM to potray the religion sympathetically -- perhaps appeal to the party's sense of fair play by giving the opposition large advantages.

The problem is, I don't really see where to add this to the current sub. Maybe as "ideas for play" or a short "player investment" section at the bottom? I'm sure Shadow would welcome any ideas you choose to add here, as well. Go to Comment
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MysticMoon's comment on 2013-08-27 08:03 PM

We need a "save the cultist" movement. For too long have the forces of good and right trampled upon the simple, hardworking, and downtrodden cultist; those whose only collective desire is to unleash world-destroying demonic forces. Is that really so worthy of being harried in their homes and put to the sword in their places of worship? Have we no tolerance?

:P

Ok, seriously, this is one of those great ideas that seems like it should have been completely obvious, yet has never occurred to me before. Great work on this. 5/5


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Darkornyx's comment on 2013-03-27 06:52 AM
I enjoyed reading this submission... Soooo much fun~ Go to Comment
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Gossamer's comment on 2013-03-28 09:00 AM
"companion, Errat, and and the roguish woman"
Not being picky, but if it was me, I'd like someone to point it out for me. Go to Comment
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Shadoweagle's comment on 2013-01-20 05:05 AM
Update: Inspired by Bulvan the Merchant in Murometz's Forum Roleplaying game, "The Road to Canagadi." This is the kind of thing I imagine he is going to unleash on us shortly! :) Go to Comment
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Shadoweagle's comment on 2013-01-21 04:09 PM
Update: Ah, one thing I realize I had left out; if the Gandacai is slain before his puppets, the puppets will crumple to the ground, also. They are controlled solely by the will of the Gandacai.

Also, Gandacai is an anagram of Canagadi; the town which is the focus of the game we are currently in. Go to Comment
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Cheka Man's comment on 2013-01-20 02:30 PM
A hard thing to deal with. Go to Comment
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Murometz's comment on 2013-01-22 08:26 PM
They possess... demons!!! That's a new one for me. Love it, and going to use it someday! Paragons! Puppets!

This puts Ol' Bulvan the soul-merchant to shame :)

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Murometz's comment on 2013-01-22 08:26 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
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valadaar's comment on 2014-07-14 07:31 AM
This badass is nifty. Adding to my collection. Go to Comment
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Kassy's comment on 2013-06-01 05:22 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
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Morte's comment on 2013-01-22 02:11 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
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