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Flickerwik
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Swamp)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-31 06:14 AM
I like it. Simple but with a lot of uses. Now, don't bite my head off. But I have a few things to say about grammar(even though it doesn't affect your score);

Terrified, the young man turned to run, but as more of those tendrils lashed themselves onto his body (I think you meant latched here).

During the daytime, it's powers are largely dampened and it's Shadow-Servant melts away

•While travelling the swamps in the daytime, one of the PC's

•The PC's have been asked to the Princes name-day celebration

As for all of these, think about "it's" as an abbreviation of "it is". So anywhere it is doesn't fit, use its instead. As for anything else, the apostrophe is used to indicate ownership. With that last sentence, the apostrophe in the PC's should be moved to the Princes instead. The Prince "owns" the name-day celebration, it is his celebration, but the PCs don't own have been asked. This is also true when used in names, e.g. Bob's car. It also holds true with names ending with an s, such as Dennis's car. Hope you take this as it is intended, in a friendly manner. Go to Comment
Flickerwik
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Swamp)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-31 10:44 AM
Alright, I wasn't aware of whether or not you knew, since you had repeated the mistake throughout and in another sub as well. I meant no disrespect. But honestly, people who choose to be offended, those are people I probably would have fallen out with sooner or later anyways. I've allready ranted about this in the chatbox, so I won't repeat it here. I'm generally pretty laid back, but when it comes to submissions, I feel like it is a good idea to try and help eachother out. Because some of the people on here, might become writers one day, and if they've got it down before they start on that novel, it will be so much easier for them. Of course not everyone on here wants to become writers, and if they disapprove, I will back off. But I'll tell you one thing, I hold myself to as high a standard as I do everyone else, and I'm not even a native English speaker. Go to Comment
Skittering Steel
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Underground)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2013-05-27 07:07 AM
i already have a few thoughts about expanding this, Moon :) Perhaps in the coming week or two i'll beef it up.
I just wanted to get something out because I feel like I haven't managed to put anything up in too long! the 100-challenge is a good way to do that! Go to Comment
Skittering Steel
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Underground)
Cheka Man's comment on 2013-05-27 12:23 PM
These should be a bigger submission. Go to Comment
Skittering Steel
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Underground)
Cheka Man's comment on 2014-06-25 05:02 PM
Could one be domesticated? Go to Comment
Skittering Steel
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Underground)
Murometz's comment on 2013-05-27 10:24 AM
Quite flavorful, and I would also like to see the expansion. Just wondering aloud, but wouldn't iron be more appropriate as opposed to "worked" steel? Anyhoo, these critters capture the imagination! Go to Comment
Skittering Steel
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Underground)
valadaar's comment on 2014-06-25 12:05 PM
This is quite interesting - I like the picture speed-painted with the words here. Go to Comment
Skittering Steel
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Underground)
Elbin's comment on 2013-05-27 12:02 PM
The most colourful 100-word I have read so far! Go to Comment
Skittering Steel
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Underground)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-27 06:44 AM
What the score says. However, I really wish you would de-100 this sub. Seems like their creation story would be an interesting one. Go to Comment
Skittering Steel
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Underground)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-27 05:49 PM
Ah, good to hear your plans for this sub. Personally, I always use the 100 word format for "abandoned ideas" or sth that came to me on-the-fly and didn't fit into the more serious stream of pieces that I write. But I know what you mean by getting sth out first. Go to Comment
Skittering Steel
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Underground)
Dossta's comment on 2013-05-28 01:28 PM
Fantastic seed idea! I really want to see more about these guys. They remind me of the Silverfish you find in Minecraft -- terrifying little creatures that live in stone and swarm out in packs once you break the rock open. I can imagine a party of adventurers, desperate to escape an underground cave system, being entirely too unwary of where they try to dig their way out . . . Go to Comment
Skittering Steel
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Underground)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2013-05-28 05:13 PM
It's a 100 word challenge, which I assume means 100 words or less to fully develop an idea. Go to Comment
Skittering Steel
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Underground)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2013-05-28 05:15 PM
I like that they inject mercury, a very flavorful idea. I think this makes a good 100 word sub because I don't really need more explanation - they're spiders made of metal. Pretty sweet. Go to Comment
Bareka
Locations  (City)   (Desert)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2013-08-30 08:29 PM
I plan on writing up a small sub to tackle this dilemma soonish! Go to Comment
Bareka
Locations  (City)   (Desert)
Cheka Man's comment on 2013-05-14 11:03 AM
I want to go there and buy stuff, but my money would be useless to them. Go to Comment
Bareka
Locations  (City)   (Desert)
Murometz's comment on 2014-01-19 11:49 AM


Great one indeed! At last, the fabled City of Glass reveals its many secrets! Forganthus' question is an interesting one. Was that addressed in another sub?



(id vote--high!--but woke up with 0 votes for some reason today)

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Bareka
Locations  (City)   (Desert)
valadaar's comment on 2013-12-26 12:45 PM
Missed this one first time through. Great job and love the use of the artwork!
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Bareka
Locations  (City)   (Desert)
Kassy's comment on 2013-05-18 07:20 AM
5.0/5

Great read. Top marks from me for this one. Go to Comment
Bareka
Locations  (City)   (Desert)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-18 01:03 AM
Just so complete a sub. Also, I find the whole Ouzquin Dremorix setting fascinating. Go to Comment
Bareka
Locations  (City)   (Desert)
Forganthus's comment on 2013-06-12 11:55 AM
What do they burn to melt the glass? Go to Comment
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