The only thing I would like more of is a more indepht description of his last battle. The introduction sort of promised me that his own confidence was his ban of sorts. Other than that this is a great historical figure that could function as a major plot hook or a red herring. Great work.
"Clad in burnished steel armor, wielding a lance, he became almost the iconic image of the Old World, mightly, lofty, and entirely too confident." Love that line! He single-handedly evokes his age and times, but is no Don Quixote!
An overall engrossing tale! All the links are apt.
Golden Halls of Nahal. In Russian, 'Nahal' (h prounounced) means a shameless, selfish, free-loafer. Fitting perhaps for an emperor :D Go to Comment
There are a few typos here and there. I only mention it because it doesn't fit with the historical text. Excellent work.
As for the "Rose by any other name" plot hook, maybe the follower is trying to gently convert the group, or at least bring them closer to the side of the faith. A plot hook that leads to other plot hooks. Go to Comment
Having left the hush of the upper halls, and crossed the depths of the Braeth (an underground river, which is not all that deep because bear in mind we're talking about gnomes here), you would find yourself in Wattling Street, the main road through Udnalor. It's actually a long, well-worn passageway which opens out eventually into the City Centre. The gnome-buildings branch off Wattling Street as small burrows or caverns with boulder-blocked doorways for privacy. You can find armourers and smiths (though their armour tends to be on the small side for humans to buy) and many other types of trader.
There are many streets, ginnels and cooies which run off Wattling Street, the most famous probably being Smell Street, the domain of the infamous gnomish alchemists, the eponymous smell being very distinctive: the stench of cooking fungus, the aroma of subterranean spices, the pungent reek of rotting carcasses (used in some of the more notorious experiments). An encounter with an alchemist can really be spiced up (excuse the pun) if you have a well-stocked herb cupboard, and actually make up the potions, elixirs and draughts as they are ordered by characters.