I like him. He is epic, without being the worlds most powerful fighter. He is a Big Bad for a story arc, a colorful figure to fill out the world. The details are good, the twists are nice, the write up excellent, and the usability is High. Thus I find it hard not to give it a 4.75, oh heck, round it up. :moon: Two paws and a tail up. Go to Comment
Thanks for pointing out the mispell, it is supposed to be Ouranga, not Ourange, one letter away from orange, I think that was the problem. As for the 15 squires, these trainees are responsible for everything from keeping his horse groomed, to oiling his armor, to making sure his pavillion tent is properly arranged. He had many servants as a lord, and grew accustomed to people waiting on him hand and foot. Go to Comment
He does have trouble wielding a sword as his ring finger has been severed at the base, his last words as a duke and hopeful for the throne were 'you will have to cut the ring off of my finger.' They did.
Thats the line that did it!!
This should be a template on how to make an ordinary bad-tempered "fighter" , COME ALIVE!!
he needs 10-15 squires? thats a lotta squire baby! does #15 carry his chamberpot?
and finally, is it Ouranga or Ourange? I prefer former. Go to Comment
Instant chrome and history to add to a city (or a country - they are likely to spread to other cities, too).
Plot hook: somebody started stealing the Chalices used in numerous processions. There are hints that an evil sorcerer wants to try a new ritual, 'that will make all people weep' or something like that. The basically worthless cups gain suddenly epic importance. Go to Comment