The only thing I would like more of is a more indepht description of his last battle. The introduction sort of promised me that his own confidence was his ban of sorts. Other than that this is a great historical figure that could function as a major plot hook or a red herring. Great work.
"Clad in burnished steel armor, wielding a lance, he became almost the iconic image of the Old World, mightly, lofty, and entirely too confident." Love that line! He single-handedly evokes his age and times, but is no Don Quixote!
An overall engrossing tale! All the links are apt.
Golden Halls of Nahal. In Russian, 'Nahal' (h prounounced) means a shameless, selfish, free-loafer. Fitting perhaps for an emperor :D Go to Comment
There are a few typos here and there. I only mention it because it doesn't fit with the historical text. Excellent work.
As for the "Rose by any other name" plot hook, maybe the follower is trying to gently convert the group, or at least bring them closer to the side of the faith. A plot hook that leads to other plot hooks. Go to Comment