Loved every word! I like the way the curse is explained (self-feeding), because until I got to that passage I was wondering why a "curse-reverse" or some such thing, wasnt atempted. Love the eunuchs! (men without testicles are always trusted :D). Love the whole gold & greed theme! But my favorite concept here, is the way the wealthy gather here to hold their meetings, surrounded by exquisite splendor. Nice touch!
I like the basics of the write up. It seems plausable, though cumbersome, to be a possible weapon. It does not need much of a historical write up... except maybe what region of the world it came from and the period... the explanation as to what it is used for covers much of the history.
I didn't dig into a backstory on this piece since it was really just an idea for a really big crossbow. As for the name, grandiose titles and claims are pretty common, what could be more potent than a dragon-slaying crossbow?
As for elephants in fantasy, Tolkien had the Oliphants, but they were way larger than a normal elephant. The others don't seem to be able to seperate the elephant from African or Indian mythology. BTW, Jordan has elephants in the Wheel of Time books, but calls them S'redit, or boar horses. Go to Comment
What you say is true, but the draw of the crossbow is not generated by the strings, but by the crossmember. While your typical bear hunting bow might be an 80 pound pull, it is 80 pounds to pull the bar. To pull the bar on the Dragon Crossbow requires that all of the strings be pulled back at the same time to get the 640 pounds of pull needed to bend the steel arm. The strings will snap if your try to pull then back 1 at a time. Go to Comment
This idea has a solid ground and reasonable believability in its design. The fact that the difficulty in use and cost has made it more of a collectors item than a useable one.
I of course, would like to see a little more write up on it, the history behind it, why it was originally made to be so durable and strong. Since its name implies it was created for dragons (I realize the elephant portion of it though) yet it has never been tested against a dragon. So if it has never been used for its possible original purpose then why build it to the point where it is nearly infamous? Go to Comment
Well, I'm not much of an expert on crossbows, but here's my take.
A longbow can be between 60 and 160 pounds worth of draw- so you may want to change the stats of the draw, as each string could feasibly (if horrendously difficultly) be cocked manually. This would undoubtedy take a while, and be so cumbersome that dryfiring would be all but certain, but it probably would take less than 5 minutes. Go to Comment
something about nobles powdering their throats, some sort of poison powder I believe it was. Loved the name, but didnt really notice anything about it afterwards. If you dont like it I can change the name. Go to Comment