Really good. I especially like the moment of creation, a contract which is not much for an ice spirit, but a lot for the sorceress. One hundred years, and one day, a good duration that. Also find the insta-cult that appered and vanished again amusing.
Many beautifully phrased passages. A pleasure to read! Like Manfred, I enjoyed the temporary cult. I also like that the duke didnt kick her out cartoon-style, the bastard at least had the royal decency to give her a good severance. I like that she chose to keep the sapphire and spill her bitterness into it, rather than setting herself up for a middle age of comfortable living. Love the "wear the pillow" line. I'm stealing the melting ice saint/goddess/frozen sorceress thingy anon for my home campaign! Naturally I'd like to see a Zehini post soon! It says Govine instead of Givone in Winter's Night plot hook. Sorry, I ramble for I shouldnt be handling heavy machinery right now. I just remembered, there could be an alternate bizarro-world plot-line, where despite the fact that it was forbidden for those of Zehini blood to receive the church's "blessings", Givone had an old friend inside the faiths priesthood. An old kind gentle man that watched her grow up and thought of her as a grandaughter. He was tormented. Obey the faith? or allow this poor barren woman, a chance at the joys of motherhood. In the end he chose his friendship with Givone. He treated her privately for some time and the duchess was aglow with seed! Go to Comment
Since Ergot is a real plant, with these real properties, there is no reason why this shouldn't have a straight forward presentation.
Abby Hofman studied Ergot before he developed LSD. It is actually not derived from Ergot, it is a stepping stone to get there. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ergot
This write up is excellent though. It is a gret way to add a real substance in a fantasy way. Go to Comment
1-The Tincture of Ergot might be one of the greatest names for a substance I've ever encountered.
2-The piece has a pseudo-scientific, national geographic vibe to it, and flows well.
3-Jerry Garcia is a nice touch :D
3-Brings back memories
And it is an instant top-contender for MJS's Tobbacos, Ingredients, and Mind-Altering Substances! Go to Comment
Forgive me but I must interject my own two cents here.
It is fundamentally incorrect to say that Ergot is a real PLANT, it is indeed real, however it is a fungus that grows on plants and not a plant at all. Fugas and plants are not even in the same kingdom much less phylum, class, order and so on as you have tried to bunch them. Ergot belongs in the Kingdom Fungi, whereas all plants are part of the Kingdom Plantae. Saying Ergot is a plant is much like saying a dog is a plant.
Ergot is blamed for many historical events including the demise of the roman empire and the salem witch trials just to scratch the surface and name a couple. This is due in part to it's "medicinal" properties, and the difficulty in removing the ergot from such grains as rye in particular. Ergot is easily removed from processed grains such as flour due to the drastic color differences between the flour and the Ergot, Rye on the other hand is a very similar color to the Ergot. Ergot is a kind of reddish brown color similar to that of rye, and flour is white for the most part.
Don't mean to harp but Ergot was a major research project for me in Botany.
Very well carry on and I shall now go back to lurking. Go to Comment
The setup is definitely neat for any sci-fi/astronomy fan. It must be admitted that, though I have some idea of what Lagrange points are, the Wikipedia post was quite a bit confusing. (You could provide a simplified picture to show what it looks like... but I guess that would be a too big hint.)
So: if you have two massive objects in space, there exist locations, where their gravitational forces will be just about in balance. A relatively light object (compared to the two), would find a stable place in these Lagrange points.
In our solar system, there are of some notoriety the Lagrange points for Sun and Jupiter, or Earth and Moon. (Scrasamax, do I take it right that the two bodies your system is based on are two suns?)
Oh, and before I forget it: the rest of the submission is also not bad. :) Go to Comment