Interesting. What begins as a 'typical' dungeon well-described, ends as a trip into the belief world of a people long gone... along with something of their past being released.
There is also another ending: the queen charms/kicks/impresses the group enough to make them her new subjects, the first servants on the way to her new empire. The obvious plot-hook: get rid of your master!
I like it, and that is saying something since I normally despise dungeons (though I am pretty good at making them and have a ton of dungeon posts... go figure). Good execution; I like the formatting of the little "extras" in the quotes. Nice flow of the process and plot, the build up is subtle and strong. Take some xp from petty cash. Go to Comment
Superb - an awesome dungeon post that just got better and better. It has everything: an atmospheric, interesting dungeon, a novel setting (I have never played in or run a "caveman" dungeon), some real history and culture behind it and a good finale. To cap it all off it is liftable into almost any setting with almost no work and would be great either in a campaign or as a one-off adventure. Go to Comment
Random tables are nice in random rooms, if you catch my drift. They add atmosphere, and if they in addition say something about the place and who lived there they can be great. All in all I enjoyed this sub. I have a weak spot for the old-school dungeon. I also echo what AG said. Here, have a Scras;) Go to Comment
Very good Scrasamax. The write up is clean and simple, with lots of details and history. I like that. Only thing I did not like was the jump from the beautiful woman awakening and then all of a sudden it is obvious she is an evil vampire. Let us hope it is not Juliet in a feigned death. ;)
All in all it is a well written old school dungeon. I present you with a scras! Go to Comment
Excellent. It has a very subtle, creepy feel to it. Great details, good variety. Could have possibly used more combat, but I'll excuse that in favor of the amount of details and uniqueness. Job well done. Go to Comment
And further, it does not fit the definition of "slanderous", because that would involve an insult or defamatory statement... And unless you consider Hell to be a nice happy place, there is no such defamatory statement in this. Go to Comment
Well, wait... Just because he borrows our ideas, that doesn't mean he's not as smart as us. He took our ideas and improved upon them... That's what smart people and inventors do. So, really... It isn't insulting the Devil. It means he's more innovative and powerful than human beings because he can improve upon our ideas in his own special satanic way. Go to Comment