Nicely done and executed. Nice dramatic points. The details are prevolent... and a little work needs to be done to adapt it... as you have to find a local equivalent in your world. Still a great idea. Paws Up! Go to Comment
A place made for political games and meetings. I like the curse, and touch of eunuchs being in charge gives the history an ironic undertone. Excellent; also a good excuse to put a great palace full of treasures within reach without fearing your PC's will rob it. ;)
I can imagine the odd worshipper of gold coming to this temple to honour the thought and enjoy the sight. Sometimes, they could even bring a bit of gold to add to the treasure, knowing well it cannot be taken away anymore; what other offering for the god (goddess?) of Gold is there? The eunuchs running the place know of them, and leave them as harmless fools. Of course, should anyone ever manage to break the curse, he will earn undying revenge of those influential and wealthy men.
Oh, and any goldsmith may also want to visit the place, to take inspiration from the beauty, and practice his trade by repairing anything damaged. It could be an excellent place to train apprentices, teaching them honesty most easily.
Plot hook: not far from the Palace, you find a dead magpie (or any bird or beast that likes shiny things), a piece of gold still clutching in her claws. Will you take the risk and transport it back? Or leave it lying, not knowing who will find it and bring upon himself the curse? Go to Comment
Awesome. I like the description, and the idea of the curse. Actually, I can imagine that the kind/local power has people working on researching a way to break the curse, since a substantial amount of wealth is tied up in the building. I can also imagine that the consortium of bankers and financial figures is doing all they can to prevent such a breakthrough, maybe even to assassinating the researchers. Go to Comment
"and practice his trade by repairing anything damaged."
But if he got any golddust on himself when he was doing that, and then he went to leave...
Speaking of gold dust, that's be a great way to assassinate the entire Merchants Guild. You sneak into the kitchen and put some gold in their wine, they drink it and go to leave. Suddenly they're struck by the curse too. *cues evil laughter* Go to Comment
Loved every word! I like the way the curse is explained (self-feeding), because until I got to that passage I was wondering why a "curse-reverse" or some such thing, wasnt atempted. Love the eunuchs! (men without testicles are always trusted :D). Love the whole gold & greed theme! But my favorite concept here, is the way the wealthy gather here to hold their meetings, surrounded by exquisite splendor. Nice touch!
I like the basics of the write up. It seems plausable, though cumbersome, to be a possible weapon. It does not need much of a historical write up... except maybe what region of the world it came from and the period... the explanation as to what it is used for covers much of the history.
I didn't dig into a backstory on this piece since it was really just an idea for a really big crossbow. As for the name, grandiose titles and claims are pretty common, what could be more potent than a dragon-slaying crossbow?
As for elephants in fantasy, Tolkien had the Oliphants, but they were way larger than a normal elephant. The others don't seem to be able to seperate the elephant from African or Indian mythology. BTW, Jordan has elephants in the Wheel of Time books, but calls them S'redit, or boar horses. Go to Comment