Well, I'm not much of an expert on crossbows, but here's my take.
A longbow can be between 60 and 160 pounds worth of draw- so you may want to change the stats of the draw, as each string could feasibly (if horrendously difficultly) be cocked manually. This would undoubtedy take a while, and be so cumbersome that dryfiring would be all but certain, but it probably would take less than 5 minutes. Go to Comment
something about nobles powdering their throats, some sort of poison powder I believe it was. Loved the name, but didnt really notice anything about it afterwards. If you dont like it I can change the name. Go to Comment
Nicely described, and not your average dungeon dive. I like the Guardians and the Psychopomp, and the idea of the Shade-touched and the Soul-taken, which fits in nicely with a concept I've been playing with for a bit. Go to Comment
Nicely detailed and well presented. It smacks of the secret religious conspiracy idea that is so popular these days; though the building of the new religious site is nearly as old as religion itself. Good dramatic elements on this one too. Go to Comment
I guess my only responce would be in a region where barrows are just shy of being common this isn't A Barrow...it is The Barrow, the first that is listed, kind of Like Kufu's Pyramid, or Stone Henge (since there are many stone henges, but only one gets to use the name) Go to Comment
Excellent! what Moon and Cap said. Oh and I dont think its all that long, nor do I find it rambling. My favorite barrow has always been the one from the first Conan movie. I think it might be this one now. You achieved the right atmosphere with this as well. The only minor nitpik would be the name "Great Barrow'. It seems a tad bland for such a morbid and exotic location. I give this a Scras! Go to Comment