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Dreifach
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EchoMirage's comment on 2006-04-21 02:09 AM
An interesting and realistic city with much history. I like it :)

just: for us germanophiles, 'Dreifach' as name just doesn't fit. Threefold? Likewise, the 'Tausend'... Go to Comment
Dreifach
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Cheka Man's comment on 2006-04-14 02:55 PM
One of the greater imaginary cities that I have read about. Go to Comment
Dreifach
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TheSnakeRoselynAlexandra's comment on 2006-04-22 02:59 PM
As always I love you work hun. Go to Comment
Dreifach
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Murometz's comment on 2006-04-14 04:48 PM
I cant find fault with it. It reeks of reality! And as usual I love the structure of the sub. A tidy but RICH history and vibe. Go to Comment
Dreifach
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Murometz's comment on 2006-04-22 10:26 AM
For whats its worth, I think Dreifach is a great name, and I think Threefold is a pretty cool name for a city as well, even if the translation was the same in Falhath. It fits.

This opens up a whole can of worms. Does this mean I cant name an island "Paa'lua'a'pa'o" because it means "Scratch my left nut" in Polynesian?

on a side note: no beer drinkers? I might have to deduct a full sword! Go to Comment
Dreifach
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valadaar's comment on 2014-10-10 02:32 PM
A great city - I can see it in my minds eye. Good stuff! Go to Comment
Black Oleander
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Swamp)
MoonHunter's comment on 2006-04-13 10:09 AM
Good detail, nice cultural intergration, well executed, and good plot leads. Two paws up. Go to Comment
Black Oleander
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Swamp)
Cheka Man's comment on 2006-04-12 03:57 PM
Another wonderful submission from you. Go to Comment
Black Oleander
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Murometz's comment on 2006-04-12 04:11 PM
Four plot hooks for a flower. Very nice :)

As usual its the details that do it!

I just read about Yellow Oleanders, and how they are the leading tool for suicide in some country or other, literally seconds before seeing this sub, so that was pretty cool! Go to Comment
Black Oleander
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Swamp)
punkcasher's comment on 2009-03-13 09:06 AM
Cool. I read the stuff about yellow oleanders too.

:) Go to Comment
The Bosques
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Scrasamax's comment on 2006-04-11 03:53 PM
Moved from NPCs/Extra-Horde as suggested by Moonhunter Go to Comment
The Bosques
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Cheka Man's comment on 2006-04-13 12:06 PM
Nice-a low/no magic people. Go to Comment
The Bosques
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Michael Jotne Slayer's comment on 2011-01-31 10:10 AM


A solid portrayal. 


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The Bosques
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Ancient Gamer's comment on 2006-04-12 04:02 PM
Normally I would have given such a sub 3.5, but I found the little references in this tale exciting. Although it was a very short post, the constant references to places and events lent it a richness I found fitting. A good achievement for a short cultural post. Go to Comment
The Bosques
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Roack's comment on 2006-04-12 08:59 PM
Strong post, great name, unique... but short. I'd love it if you either fleshed it out more or posted the numerous references and linked them. Go to Comment
The Bosques
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Pariah's comment on 2006-04-12 08:59 PM
I pat you on the back for doing these 'peeps' so well. Interesting people. Go to Comment
The Bosques
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Murometz's comment on 2006-04-12 04:05 PM
2 things make them unique. Well 3. Their strong distaste for magic is sublime! I like that they are heavy wine drinkers, but ale eludes them. Facial hair immediately makes me picture them. Thats a nice touch Nice details! Am I supposed to mention their Basqueness or not?

I have mentioned my love for LOW magic campaigns several times in previous comments, so I tend to think of Bosques as "My Peeps!" Go to Comment
The Bosques
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axlerowes's comment on 2012-12-09 09:10 PM
I think this is good candidate for your hundred word treatment. I also think you would get further at communicating the nature of these people you envisioned if you used the same number of words to write a short story about an encounter with the Bosques. I have to assume that you imagined more to these people then what is listed. They are a nice enough idea, but it lacks any real imagery or transporting detail.

The first paragraph list a bunch of facts, but has no hook. I will follow the link, but still just a bunch of facts that suggest a larger world. This is a plus I find, in that it gives the post the feel of in an game write up or an in world voice. So that is nice.

The second paragraph I think should be switched with the third paragraph. It would explain why they had no magic and it would assert that the culture came before the location. If you want to assert some other relationship between the culture and the location than you should do so.

The second half of the third paragraph should be its own paragraph as it is making an additional point. You then state that Bosques have a "stoic discipline". So I guess that being named after a lazy meandering river was undeserved and that this stoic discipline does not extend to vivacious swooning women.

The rest of the information is also rather sparse, if this was part of a list of cultures, than perhaps that would justify its brevity. Go to Comment
The Bosques
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valadaar's comment on 2014-08-26 12:04 PM
I am beginning to appreciate shorter submissions, and I think this one accomplishes the job of quickly painting a people. Go to Comment
The Order of Orders
Society/ Organizations  (Combative)   (Trans World)
Strolen's comment on 2012-09-14 12:55 PM
At first I just stared at the submission dumbfounded....and then I scrolled.

Ahhhhhhhh!

:) Go to Comment
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