Scas this is a huge disappointment from your FANTASTIC other stuff(I am totally a fan of the cosmic era . you are by far my fav sub person and you let me down 2.5/5 (dont hate me ) Still think space whates are best thing since sliced bread Go to Comment
I think they don't even want to restore her, or to substitute the hormones. Why deal with puberty when you can have a perfectly stable kid general?
Possibly, I'd revisit what kind of body she chooses for herself; it might not be girlish teen androids. The gamer in her might choose a body that appears imposing, epic and still cool, an iconic over-the top sculpt that has nothing to do with how she might have looked if not for her sickness. Go to Comment
Can I say, I feel bad for her? Which is a good thing. A somewhat tragic powerful presence, messed up in head, and a damn interesting character for a novel. I imagine you can go many ways with her...good, bad, other. The 27 pounds of brain and suspended viscera is a jolting image.
I'm going to have to look up what the heck an Ender Wiggin is now. Go to Comment
There were some grammatical issues here and there, but this is solid. I loved the mention of "plaid and polka dot" morality. I loved the fact that his single lingering testicle actually affects him mentally (and being that mental faculties seem to be what he is, that's quite a big deal).
I would really love to use him as a late-tier villain in my upcoming Powers for Good campaign. He's really great and he'd definitely fit in. Thanks to you, I now realise that I can use some of the villains of my own creation as submissions.
This is a truly wonderful post. It's definitely reminiscent of the four-colour days, but with a twinge of modern insensibilities. Well done. Go to Comment
I like the concept a lot, and think this is an excellent piece.
It's just, I sense that the creative force behind it made it stumble over itself in the effort to get written, and it feels hurried in places, and I'd welcome more detail in others.
(I'll change my vote to a higher one then)
(btw., Earth as both cradle and penal colony of humanity is rather funny) Go to Comment