This is very good, you should be getting paid for this. I love the teaser text, drew me right in. A few things though;
1) Spell Check etc
"more fluff here" (remnant or reminder?)
"experience life through observation. It was initially thought that the machine mines would use the electronic systems of the structures"
"The machine has decided to make them it's next target, but rather than showing itself, it sends more proxies against them"
"At first everyone was pleased, the autistic and the non-functional members of society were able to become healthy and useful members again."
If this was written from a machine's point of view, then alright I guess. But it does come across as quite offensive and cynical.
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The 3 Laws of Robotics were pretty much made obsolete not long after they were created, by Asimov himself. As he explored the philosophical quanderies in his books and came to the conclusion that the 3 laws had loopholes and just didn't cut it. While most people still believe in them, people involved with robotics or robots themselves should be aware of this, so to even implement them in the first place would be like building a boat with a hole in the bottom and hoping it won't sink. Maybe just add the word revised to it, keeping it vague.
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The Near Earth Space Supremacy Act is a chartered mutual defense agreement signed between the Atlantic Federation, the Pacific Rim Coalition, the Eurasian Alliance, Free India, and the South African United Republics. The Act sets up protocols for joining forces for the common defense of Earth from an aggressor acting from outside of the planet. The NESS Act was formulated as a defensive stratagem to deter the potential for hostilities should they develop between Earth and the colonies on other planets in the Solar System.
The Tycho Conventions
Initially founded to confront the Oxygen Depletion Crisis, later becomes the International forum on arcano-ethics, comparable to the Geneva Conventions of the Petroleum Era. The Convention is held annually at the Tycho Scientific Center near the crater of the same (alternately spelled) name.
Creation of Atmospheric Processors - the original reason for the Convention, restoring the atmosphere, which at the time was badly damaged and was moving towards being unable to sustain human life.
Creche Initiative - One of the side effects of the Resource Wars was widespread extermination of many plants and animals. Bio-remediation, and creating cloned plants and animals was a priority.
Recognition of Clone Rights - A contentious issue, megacorps claim the clones they create are property, social groups and some nations consider clones sentient and free individuals.
Recognition of Sentient Rights - With machine intelligence having been established, the sentient machines demanded the recognition of their rights and free will despite not being organic in nature.
Banning WMDs - The arco-centric nature of the Cosmic Era lends itself to extreme vulnerability to weapons of mass destruction, be it nuclear explosives capable of destroying a city, or viral/bio weapons unleashed against an enclosed arco-population. This is a widely followed article, as the vulnerability is shared across the world. (Clandestine operations are still working on bio and viral weaponry, nuclear explosives have fallen out of favor as barbaric)
Banning the creation of 'ubermensh' - A perennial fear is the ubermensh, the super man. Also called the Super Soldier or Super Human article, it is one of the most commonly ignored articles of the conventions. A third of bio-augmentations available violate this article.
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Banning the creation of 'epsilons' - Aldous Huxley's Brave New World gave the world a look at Epsilons, genetically engineered subhumans, crippled in mind and body to a small group of menial tasks. The article bans the creation of subhumans for the purpose of limiting their use and creating a genetic slave class.