This submission is ripe with setting. The writing style really brings the sights and sounds of the Geofront to play out and flow uninterrupted.
The communities you create fit into the setting in a sort of balanced, justified manner. One can see not only why they persist and what their motives are but also what chain of events over the ages brought the mixing pot into the state it is now.
Inclusion of the Pandor box is a particularly great touch. Go to Comment
@Scrasamax: are these akin to deities in non-tech settings? As in, are these beings that are worshiped? Or, by avatar, do you mean more like what people show up like when you plug into the matrix / online interaction? Go to Comment
Great writing here! From the tag line on, makes me sit up and pay attention. Can't help but feel sorry for these guys. Good job in bringing out the emotional angle. Good voice in this piece! Here's hoping that someday they'll find their Paradiso, be it real or abstract.
This post made me think of the Morlocks from The Time Machine. Subterranean dwellers who were once the servant class and over millenia developed to prey upon those who live on the surface.
The patchwork men seek Paradisio - is that the surface world (which they could probably easily reach) or more of an abstract concept?
Patchwork men conjure up some good images. Hacking and piecing together components is a great way to develop regional differences and allow for variety among patchwork men of a certain area. The big boss might have taken apart some sort of high-profile target, for instance, and would have their weapons systems embedded in its hulk. Go to Comment
5/5 says it all,fantastic fluff for any cyberpunk background, I think Scras said something somewhere about a new tone to his submisions,if I'm right and the last couple have set the new tone, I so aprove! Go to Comment
That could certainly work, but then you end up with a large and unwieldy codex, like the random encounter codices we made. They are massive. I also have no idea how useful they are, or if they are just monuments we've piled up and walk around. Go to Comment