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Prehena
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Cheka Man's comment on 2006-05-24 08:24 PM
I like her. Go to Comment
Prehena
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Michael Jotne Slayer's comment on 2005-11-29 08:24 AM
More history, less cliché. Good solid post. Go to Comment
Prehena
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Ancient Gamer's comment on 2005-11-28 12:11 PM
Ummmm... Forrest Gump with healing tears! (seriously, her trusting nature reminded me of him). Go to Comment
Prehena
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Zylithan's comment on 2005-11-28 01:18 AM
I like the main idea of her tears of sorrow/empathy make animals be good. I appreciate also how you keep things general for many different worlds. At the same time, dont be too afraid of details... people can just ignore ones they don't like unless your whole character depends on it. In this post, a little more histroy might be nice. I wonder, if she is so kind to animals and they become good once she cries on them... has an animal ever mauled her (it wouldnt be nice until after she cried on it, right? So maybe she goes to help it and it mauls her... how does this affect her if it were to happen?) Go to Comment
Prehena
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RuthieA's comment on 2005-11-27 01:58 PM
Updated: I'm just finishing her up, I didn't finish last time. Go to Comment
Prehena
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RuthieA's comment on 2005-11-29 07:26 PM
Updated: I tried to add more specifics and history Go to Comment
Prehena
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RuthieA's comment on 2005-11-29 08:35 PM
Updated: I wanted to add details and fine tune my description, Go to Comment
Prehena
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valadaar's comment on 2007-02-09 02:36 PM
An interesting character with a lot of potential. I might generalize calm and non-aggressive instead of evil, as cobras aren't really smart enough to be evil. Aggressive,yes. Go to Comment
Prehena
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Kassy's comment on 2008-07-13 05:55 AM
I actually quite like this one but like Ancient Gamer said it also rminds me a bit of Forest Gump with healing tears thrown in, other than that not bad. Go to Comment
Jazlin
NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
Zylithan's comment on 2005-11-26 11:27 AM
RuthieA-
I like the post, and you did a great job with formatting and spelling/grammer. By making little sections you were able to give us a lot of details about the character. You gave different ways of incorporating her (with different or no religions) and you did not flood the post with game-specific terms (+X to whatever) both of which are also good. If there were one thing I would say to work on it is to make the character more original. Many healers are beautiful, many beneficient powerful beings appear weak to test people - that doesn't mean it's not okay to use these stereotypes... they get used because people like them. But if you can come up with a new idea, that's even better. For example, good people and healers are often beautiful and bad people and monsters are often ugly. Why? Do we think this is how life is? It's convention, but that makes it lazy. When was the last time you heard about the ugly lady who became a healer because she realized she was not popular for her looks, so she had to be really nice. And then maybe a powerful spiirit rewarded her for persevering instead of just being jealous, and enhanced her power.
So, in summary, it's a GREAT first post, and I'm looking forward to seeing more from you. Go to Comment
Jazlin
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RuthieA's comment on 2005-11-25 09:53 PM
Updated: I think I may have put her in the wrong influence catigory. Go to Comment
Jazlin
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RuthieA's comment on 2005-11-26 04:24 PM
Thanks, The categories actually came with the form for submitting NPCs, though. Oh, and the game specific terms make my head spin :-). Go to Comment
Jazlin
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valadaar's comment on 2013-04-24 01:15 PM
Well written, though she has be been generalized to a point where she lacks any real flavour.

Make her have reason and a personality beyond being a walking heal spell.

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Jazlin
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Kassy's comment on 2008-07-13 05:52 AM
Not too bad a submission, but i do think it highly overpowered, no offense of course but i think it needs toning down a bit.

4/5 thats a rather high vote for only a small sub, which i think does need expanding on.

You have some really good potential here Ruthie, it just needs that last final tuning and toning down of the item.

2.5/5

Ok first sub though. Go to Comment
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