I especially like the journal!! Perfectly evokes distant exotic lands. One question- why are two meter piranha/gorilla hybrids with teeth that can cut through steel and rippling arms of muscle so weak and easy to kill individually? Go to Comment
While interesting I find it lacking in substance. As a lifeform I feel it should have a few things that should be standard among submissions. I am confused as to its purpose and the reason (no pun intended) behind an insatiable hunger for life not not have a desire to feed.
The concept itself of a emotionless etherial killer is nice, but it needs a purpose and a fulfilling nature. Which I understand are its desire for food. But why do they only desire that? WHy are the desired by mages? What is the purpose behind anyone wishing to own one or covet one so?
The Reason feeds off emotion, making its target, while far wiser, a cold, emotionless, and most likely insane shell.
In their feeding do they make the source more intellilgent. By reading this line it confused me. They feed off emotion yes, but what is the by product and how does it affect the source?
I think it has promise but I also feel it needs some fleshing out. Go to Comment
Man developed skin cancer, and Arebek chortled with glee!
Man chose Ra, and Arebek screamed "No no no, ME!!"
Man moved to Florida and Arebek followed
Man invented sun screen and Arebek hollered! Go to Comment