Wow, this is a good one, and is just the sort of thing I was hoping for with Exotic Mount. I think that the visual here is pretty neat - who can complain about people riding around on swimming flowers? I also like how you've worked the flower heavily into the monks' lives, outside of just a means of transport. I can really imagine this a part of some big, fantastic painting.
Job's a good 'un.
(On that note, though, I don't deserve any credit at all for this - I did nothing more than suggest what I hoped was an inspirational freetext).
I see what you mean by victim of a bad edit. It's certainly more than a little chunky. I'll take a look at it at fix the spelling errors here sooner than later.
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You actually had more to do with this post than you think. You asked a lot of good questions in chat the other day. The answers are there; on the surface, lurking in the shadows, and in the developing world around the lotus.
Awesome!! Great visual, great details (Tsamno, partially digested delicacies, etc...). Smacks of surreal "old sorcery" (you know that time before the waves swallowed atlantis and all that) Very trippy!!
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I once did some crappy submission about 9 and half ways to use a giant lotus in fantasy. This certainly takes the cake!
I had very little to do with this exceptional write up or this wonderful world you have created. But this fantastic, I loved it when you told me about it and I love it now.
The first paragraph has a number of errors in it and doesn't flow as well as the rest of the piece. The second sentence for example seems to be the victim of a bad edit.
But after the second paragraph the whole piece moves really smoothly and clearly .