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The Guilds of Efeterthrop
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dawood2's comment on 2013-10-02 08:58 PM
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Whineys Adding Machine
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Strolen's comment on 2011-03-02 12:41 PM


That would be one awkward office party. If I was Jimmy I would do the books myself after the 4th accountant was caught skimming, my 3rd girl was killed and after I was almost murdered twice. Jimmy doing the books sure would show them. ;)


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Whineys Adding Machine
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Cheka Man's comment on 2011-03-02 07:41 AM


lol, a possesed office machine.


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Whineys Adding Machine
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Murometz's comment on 2011-03-01 11:32 PM
Interesting. The Departed meets Office Space meets possessed adding machine. Works for me!

Also, nice way to mock the weaselly mob accountant personality stereotype. This thing would be a great addition to Garage Sale Items from Hell scroll! :) Go to Comment
Whineys Adding Machine
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valadaar's comment on 2013-04-18 01:59 PM
I can't add to Silveressa's comment. Good job! Go to Comment
Whineys Adding Machine
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Silveressa's comment on 2011-03-17 03:58 AM


A fun little item that could work well in the Supernatural RPG for one a more lighthearted/amusing adventure theme. Well done!


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A Brother’s Frustration and Forgiveness
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Michael Jotne Slayer's comment on 2011-02-24 04:13 PM


Nice formatting, bold on headers would be a nice improvement, double spacing looks good. A bit DnDish and reading stuff like "grant the owner +1 Dex" and "Could be represented by 1d4 Dex ability damage" tears my soul apart as this is a non-system site. All in all a good solid submission with some minor issues.


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A Brother’s Frustration and Forgiveness
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valadaar's comment on 2013-05-20 07:45 AM
An interesting item, though very specific. Go to Comment
A Brother’s Frustration and Forgiveness
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Silveressa's comment on 2011-02-23 11:48 PM


Nice tale with a handy magical trinket inside. This should be fun to spring on the parties thief in my next fantasy adventure.


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A Brother’s Frustration and Forgiveness
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Renlim's comment on 2011-02-24 05:24 PM
Yes, the non-system thing still gets me from time to time. Thanks for the advice. Go to Comment
Timmy the Tequila Worm Brand Tequila
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EchoMirage's comment on 2011-02-23 03:43 AM


I like the image of an insidious tequila worm that is up to no good. I picture him with a tiny sombrero on his wormy head.



The sole objection: Donovan, being a competent wizard using suggestion magicks should have found it quite easy to go all Jedi on the investors. "You WANT to revise the contract. The original Timmy is FAR better. No one will LOVE you unless you abandon this folly."


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Timmy the Tequila Worm Brand Tequila
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Cheka Man's comment on 2011-02-23 10:23 AM


*imagines the evil worm cackling away*


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Murometz's comment on 2011-02-24 07:38 PM
Well, this is different. And quite engaging! I like Echo and Sil's ideas as well. Also, what they all said. Welcome (!) If the tequilla is an indication of your brand of fantasy, I'm going to enjoy your subs.

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valadaar's comment on 2013-05-20 07:51 AM
"Duuuude, the worm, is like, talkin' ta me...."

What an wonderfully odd one here... Go to Comment
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Silveressa's comment on 2011-02-23 06:25 AM


A nice magical brew to complicate and and to the intrigue of any political/royal campaign. One can expect dire consequences awaiting the poor soul who unwittingly gives a 5th addition bottle to the prince they are courting, (Or the king to gain his favor when courting the princess) 



I'd have to agree with with Echo though about the wizard being able to somehow influence these merchants to his own ends, or at the very least realize their threats of imprisonment were empty given without him to produce the enchanted booze they'd have no product at all. (And his influential magic could surely convince the judge/duke to let him off with a mere fine.)

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Silveressa's comment on 2011-02-23 09:00 AM
Glad I could help, although personally I would keep Donovan a kindly wizard dismayed at the abuse of his creation and perhaps have the merchants either:

A) Steal his magical tome and notes on how to make Timmy and give it to a more willing mage and include in the contract a "fair use" clause letting them use any variant of Timmy they choose regardless of who creates it and holding license over who can produce "Timmy" (Leaving Donovan "bought out" and more or less helpless to oppose the abuse of Timmy and perhaps fading into obscurity over time or going insane from it.)

or B) Have his apprentice betray him when he objected to the new Timmy use and run off to aid the company and make the twisted Timmy's for a small fortune leaving Donovan more or less powerless to stop him.

Regardless it's a great concept, I love these magics that are non run-of-the-mill and truly unique, keep up the great subs! Go to Comment
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Moonlake's comment on 2011-02-24 06:03 PM


The underlying idea is solid and logical. The overall submission is also quite likeable as a whole. A good first post.


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MysticMoon's comment on 2011-02-23 07:17 PM


This is an excellent sub. I agree with EchoMirage and Silveressa (I would probably go with option "B" if I use this.)



This would be a great plot starter - freshly loaded with loot, the group's warrior buys the "best" liquor of the house, only to wake up the next morning in jail with no memory of the things he's being accused of.



The only other thing I would add is to make the sub more system-agnostic by rewording the parts about making a Will DC check and inflicting Constitution damage.


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Renlim's comment on 2011-02-23 08:01 AM


Your both absolutely right, why would a competent wizard find himself in a position that he couldn’t talk/magic his way out of.  I spent the better part of the morning thinking about it, a number of ideas came up but only one I had maintains the majority of the story.  This idea in fact being that the investors were prepared for Donovan at the signing.  The awkwardness and pressure was not natural in nature, it twisted his perceptions and limited his ability to think logically through the situation.  (The room its self could be a whole new submission now that I’m thinking about it.)  Seeing that all business was conducted in the room Donovan fell to its powers a number of times. 



Thanks for the advice. 


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Renlim's comment on 2011-02-23 10:55 AM
"A" I love this idea, i started down this road but coulden't flesh it out right in my head. Both are great and I might use the second as a plot hook in the future. Go to Comment
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