A fun little item that could work well in the Supernatural RPG for one a more lighthearted/amusing adventure theme. Well done!
Nice formatting, bold on headers would be a nice improvement, double spacing looks good. A bit DnDish and reading stuff like "grant the owner +1 Dex" and "Could be represented by 1d4 Dex ability damage" tears my soul apart as this is a non-system site. All in all a good solid submission with some minor issues.
Nice tale with a handy magical trinket inside. This should be fun to spring on the parties thief in my next fantasy adventure.
I like the image of an insidious tequila worm that is up to no good. I picture him with a tiny sombrero on his wormy head.
The sole objection: Donovan, being a competent wizard using suggestion magicks should have found it quite easy to go all Jedi on the investors. "You WANT to revise the contract. The original Timmy is FAR better. No one will LOVE you unless you abandon this folly."
A nice magical brew to complicate and and to the intrigue of any political/royal campaign. One can expect dire consequences awaiting the poor soul who unwittingly gives a 5th addition bottle to the prince they are courting, (Or the king to gain his favor when courting the princess)
I'd have to agree with with Echo though about the wizard being able to somehow influence these merchants to his own ends, or at the very least realize their threats of imprisonment were empty given without him to produce the enchanted booze they'd have no product at all. (And his influential magic could surely convince the judge/duke to let him off with a mere fine.)
The underlying idea is solid and logical. The overall submission is also quite likeable as a whole. A good first post.
This is an excellent sub. I agree with EchoMirage and Silveressa (I would probably go with option "B" if I use this.)
This would be a great plot starter - freshly loaded with loot, the group's warrior buys the "best" liquor of the house, only to wake up the next morning in jail with no memory of the things he's being accused of.
The only other thing I would add is to make the sub more system-agnostic by rewording the parts about making a Will DC check and inflicting Constitution damage.
Your both absolutely right, why would a competent wizard find himself in a position that he couldn’t talk/magic his way out of. I spent the better part of the morning thinking about it, a number of ideas came up but only one I had maintains the majority of the story. This idea in fact being that the investors were prepared for Donovan at the signing. The awkwardness and pressure was not natural in nature, it twisted his perceptions and limited his ability to think logically through the situation. (The room its self could be a whole new submission now that I’m thinking about it.) Seeing that all business was conducted in the room Donovan fell to its powers a number of times.
Thanks for the advice.
Items (Tools) (Cursed)
That would be one awkward office party. If I was Jimmy I would do the books myself after the 4th accountant was caught skimming, my 3rd girl was killed and after I was almost murdered twice. Jimmy doing the books sure would show them. ;)
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