I quite like the write-up of this family of Gods and the setting when you explained the inspiration for them. But I think some of the background needs to be expanded eg. who tempered with the contract b/w Retir & Dharina and why.
btw, I think the bracer thing that you mentioned are called armguards
F.Y.I. There is more... I just wanted to give a summary and see how well it's received before fleshing the rest of it out for you. Let me know what you would like completed as a individual entry. Thanks for your attention. Go to Comment
This isn't the complete batch of deities. I guess I can see why you thought it was complete. This submission is only a single family and a summary at that... to give you, the folks at Strolen, a chance to decide if fleshing out the whole world here, is worth it. Making the myths is more difficult as all original deities how ever many that might be, could be included in each myth. I'm seeking collaboration on this and was unsure which direction I should go with submission types etc. and I figure that a future codex of all contributions might be best. Go to Comment
This was going to be huge... I was going to flesh out each deity, their priesthoods, and their dogma in separate submissions. Lack of interest convinced me drop the project. I have to admit that Retir & Dharina where more developed than most. Thanks for giving it a look, Moonlake. If this is something that would be used, I might pick it up again. Go to Comment
The origin concept is pretty cool, the gods are okay.
I know it's a first draft, feels like it. I think the myths need some more detail and the composition needs tightening up, but it's a nice first pass, a good overall concept and a good reason for very different gods to be thrown together - in fact I'm surprised they aren't more different. Go to Comment