thanks for the comments.

May get around to doing a post regarding the sundering, perhaps mentioning the religion also. Go to Comment

Good background, interesting details. A nice modification of the classic paladinic order. Go to Comment

what Dozus said! Go to Comment

Not bad! Go to Comment

Alright, fine.
I warn you off jacking world cultures too closely, though. Go to Comment

An excellently done submissions. It has description, depth, and good dramatic hooks. He has many uses. Two paws up! Go to Comment

Well presented submission, the adventure hooks are good and the character is well explained even if there isnt much on him, rather than his deeds. The character reminds me of the main character from The 13th Warrior. Go to Comment

I like him.Well written and well described. Go to Comment

Can’t really add much to this – the others have pretty much said it all

The sort of character who can logically exist somewhere in almost any game world

And some nice little plot hooks to boot

A useful NPC the have around

Nice work Priv8eye – 4/5 I think Go to Comment

Thanks for comment. Yeah he is based a bit on that character, or rather more from the Michael Chrichton novel Eaters of the Dead on which the film was based. Go to Comment

Great Book, Good Film, Nice character adaptation! Go to Comment

pretty good.
the hooks are good as well.
keep it up. Go to Comment

Yup, a good solid NPC. Go to Comment

Not bad, they have some colour to themselves. Oh, and don't be afraid to use some bold on the titles, it will make it nicer.

A believable group of people. Go to Comment

Easy: add html tags for bold into the text. (There is also html help on the right side of the editing screen.) Go to Comment

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Nice solid post. There are some dramatic hooks.

Bold for the titles would be nice.

The one things I cound most off setting was:
Styrics are an emotionally lead people who inhabit

You should be more careful for your introductory blurb. It colors people perception of your entire post. Go to Comment

This is more or less copied from David Eddings' works. Not inspired by them, copied.

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Nice. 4/5. Go to Comment

Only voted Go to Comment